just finished this one! what do ya guys think?
www.myspace.com/dannybyrnemusic
1st and only song on there
www.myspace.com/dannybyrnemusic
1st and only song on there
chiseled in stone - newly recorded original
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BigMuffinMan
New member
That was really, really good.
jeffmaher
New member
Wow!
Danny, that wuz freaking great!
Why:
The lyric was natural. Good rhyme.
the phrasing...and the little extra-measure dipsy-doodle in the chorus...
really hookish and memorable.
The restraint and taste of a veteran song-deliverer and band leader, or
just gifted, understated, tasteful arranging. Super ears and instincts.
Execution of parts was careful...time: perfect....real attention paid to
performance and perfection.
Voice sweet and airy....relaxed, natural, pitch-perfect. Wicked great to hear.
Progressions make sense...nothing too esoteric , just for superfluous 'dig me'. Only what the song needed to tell the story....and I felt it. Got the emotional message past my brain...and I'm not a 'word guy'. Again, good instincts.
At 0:48, there's a phrase that wanders off....might want to envelope the spot to increase the volume, so it can be heard.
I thought the guitar would do well to have its strings freshened...sounded a little dead and gummy...that Taylor should be ringing.
I also thought that the guitar, bein' a feature throughout the tune, could use stereo miking to fill the field....very mono. But the light orchestration, later, does a nice job of widening. {tastefully done, as well]
Then I figured you were going for abject realism, with the guitar and vocal centered, as in live listening, and though you're onto something pure and realist. Either way, great...but a little ear candy in the guitar...new strings and stereo spread...wouldn't hurt. {the 1/2 step down tuning might have a little to do with the slight deadness of the sound....and clues me in to the likelyhood that you're probably gigging a lot...in 'voice-save' mode. And you sure don't sound like a beginner.
I love everything about this tune...including the quality of the recording.
And I'd enjoy being on a stage with you.
A '10'.
Danny, that wuz freaking great!
Why:
The lyric was natural. Good rhyme.
the phrasing...and the little extra-measure dipsy-doodle in the chorus...
really hookish and memorable.
The restraint and taste of a veteran song-deliverer and band leader, or
just gifted, understated, tasteful arranging. Super ears and instincts.
Execution of parts was careful...time: perfect....real attention paid to
performance and perfection.
Voice sweet and airy....relaxed, natural, pitch-perfect. Wicked great to hear.
Progressions make sense...nothing too esoteric , just for superfluous 'dig me'. Only what the song needed to tell the story....and I felt it. Got the emotional message past my brain...and I'm not a 'word guy'. Again, good instincts.
At 0:48, there's a phrase that wanders off....might want to envelope the spot to increase the volume, so it can be heard.
I thought the guitar would do well to have its strings freshened...sounded a little dead and gummy...that Taylor should be ringing.
I also thought that the guitar, bein' a feature throughout the tune, could use stereo miking to fill the field....very mono. But the light orchestration, later, does a nice job of widening. {tastefully done, as well]
Then I figured you were going for abject realism, with the guitar and vocal centered, as in live listening, and though you're onto something pure and realist. Either way, great...but a little ear candy in the guitar...new strings and stereo spread...wouldn't hurt. {the 1/2 step down tuning might have a little to do with the slight deadness of the sound....and clues me in to the likelyhood that you're probably gigging a lot...in 'voice-save' mode. And you sure don't sound like a beginner.
I love everything about this tune...including the quality of the recording.
And I'd enjoy being on a stage with you.
A '10'.
.