Re-write Margaritaville

[Xeries]

I posted this in the Songwriting forum, but I thought I'd share it here, too.

Who knows, someone from HR might win:

http://www.usaweekend.com/contest/index.html

Write a new first verse to the song Margaritaville and win a trip to Jamaica.

Here's my entry:

A Goddess that I saw
Was sippin' a bar straw
I couldn't believe such a beauty I found.
But lately it's seemin'
I must a' been dreamin'
Cause when I woke up she was nowhere around.

 

[Rokket]

I don't think they would want to fly my family from the Philippines and back...



And I don't really like Jimmy Buffet after spending a few days in Key West....

 

[JTC111]

I wonder how many spam outfits are gonna buy your email address from them?

I posted this in the Songwriting forum, but I thought I'd share it here, too.

Who knows, someone from HR might win:

http://www.usaweekend.com/contest/index.html

Write a new first verse to the song Margaritaville and win a trip to Jamaica.

Here's my entry:

A Goddess that I saw
Was sippin' a bar straw
I couldn't believe such a beauty I found.
But lately it's seemin'
I must a' been dreamin'
Cause when I woke up she was nowhere around.

 

[Xeries]

I don't think they would want to fly my family from the Philippines and back...



And I don't really like Jimmy Buffet after spending a few days in Key West....

God, doesn't Key West suck, or what? I really haven't given it much of a chance, and I'm straight, which doesn't help, but I went there on a cruise ship once and the whole town was asleep during the three or four hours we had to spend there. I don't think they wake up until 3:00 PM.

But the streets smelled like urine and there was garbage all around and bums and the only stores that were open were really expensive tourist traps.

 

[Rokket]

You nailed it on the head.

Of course, if you had gotten to see some of the nightlife....


The gay population aside, the whole town is a tourist trap. And Margaritaville is in the center of it all.

But they do have some pretty good clubs....