why do you make me cry?

[LI_Slim]

It's a blues song. duh. Tell me what you think.


Why Do You Make Me Cry ©2008 by Larry Kolker


Baby I must admit it
Sometimes I’m just not around
And it’s not easy to move me or please me
Not that I mean to bring you down


So I’m a hard man to be with
I can’t deny that is so
But I cannot see why you do this to me
This is another new low



Chorus:

Why do you make me cry
Why do you make me cry
Just to show that I care?
Why do you make me cry
Why do you make me cry
Just to show you that I need you



We’ve been the world for each other
But now it’s just not the same
Babe you don’t know how it tears at me so
When you call out another man’s name


Chorus

 

[up-fiddler]

Yep, it's bluesy all right.

Larry - Nice job on the verses. You were able to write something bluesy without the tune having that 'Well I woke up this mornin' blues schtick. I especially like the repeated rhymes in the third line of each verse. They are a nice touch that makes them stand out from most songs in the genre. The choruses don't work as well for me. I think I may just need to hear them so I can get a handle on the meter and emphasis. When you have it recorded let us hear how it turns out.


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