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    on a scale of one to two, let me know what you think

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    this one is untitled and sometimes I fuck up the vocal, but it's a demo... looking for songwriting critique's here, not recording quality. I'm pretty sure I'm putting this one on our next full length. which we are supporting with tour in june (if you have read the other thread I posted).

    http://www.michaelchagnon.com/Untitled3.mp3

    look at her, she don't love like him, no
    she's said "I love you" too many times before

    she'll uncover that the love she felt is gone, but then
    rediscover that she loves him when he's gone

    these words, her comfort, lose sense in habit
    she can't see beyond the here and now

    she'll uncover that the love she felt is gone, but then
    rediscover that she loves him when he's gone

    now just supposing she finds an answer
    will she find the one she's looking for?

    she'll uncover that the love she felt is gone, but then
    rediscover that she loves him when he's gone

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    I think it sounds cool. A real indie sound to my ears , if that makes sense. I probably shouldnt put a label on indie sound but if I had to , id think of this.

    The chorus seems like a mouthful to sing. I like the lyrics reguardless. Im not much of a songwriter but thats just what I think. Take it or leave it. Keep playing.

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    so is that a one or a two

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    I'd give it a 1.65.

    Which if you had to , rounds up to a two.

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    only one person?

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    Quote Originally Posted by grn
    only one person?
    i'd give it nearly a 2, mainly because it made me smile (im not sure if that was the intention!) - it's very quirky, mainly due to the way it's sung. something of a love child between radiohead and green day...
    i think it needs a bit more though. the verses are short and the chorus part comes around very quickly, so the song is over before you know it. maybe you need to extend the verses slighly and perhaps add some form of bridge just to take the song off its routine for a minute.
    would be keen to hear when it sounds closer to what you want it to be!

    cheers

    Mark
    You've gotta keep pissing in the wind til you learn how to keep your shoes dry

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    I liked the clanging e string at times there. But I guess your guitar might have some alternate tuning. At times some good harmony between the guitar drones and your voice. Between 1 and 2? Gee, 1.65. The 'but then' sounded tough for you to get. I liked the slurred vocals.
    I really...really...REALLY have no idea what I'm talking about...AT ALL.

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    I give it a 1.99....
    Decent song. Seems to flow along nicely. Easy to listen to.
    Honey Badger is badass...he don't give a shit.

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    thanks guys, can we switch to using euclidean geometry to rate songs - btw, it was tuned down a whole step, then I dropped D, well I guess in this case I dropped from a D to a C to get that 'clanging E string'. when I finish the real thing I'll post it up. any more comments are welcome.

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    Ok, I give you a cube and a sphere and I based this on the axiomatic system...but I had to use google to get all those flash words
    I really...really...REALLY have no idea what I'm talking about...AT ALL.

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