I need some help with my lyrics, I know I'm not good, but I need to get opinions on the people that know what they are doing, I'll post a couple "songs" I wrote, The Genre is suppose to be HipHop so try & put it in that way when reading / singing aloud. Here they are...
Oo Wee
I need a lil uh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
uhh uhh ooo wee
I walk in to the club and I look to my left
I see you standing there at the front desk
I give you my bills and I walk right in
lets get this party started over again
clubs thumpin, ladies is jumpin
got me on tha track and the dj's bumpin
spinnin them tables and rockin a beat
see the bitches gettin low to the beat
I need a lil uhh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
hoppin around gettin my groove on
get to goin and they change the song
start a new beat and dance with yer feat
errbody's dancin nigga can'tchu see
turn around here and feel the vibe
it lets you know that your still alive
ladies grindin, and wearin their diamonds
flashin their bling like it matters to your highness
I need a lil uhh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
Theres one, Unfinished, I dont' know what to put for the 3rd verse
Heres another. Not Hip-Hop THough, more on the Rock Side for the next couple.
Cut Myself
I told you once and I told you twice
I probably will cut myself tonight
Depressions taken over, and thats for sure
I wanna find out baby if theres a cure
for this pain that I feel in side every time
You come around and start to cry
I said I wont cut my self
But Im going through a livin hell
I'll try not to cut myself
To get out of this deceptive hell
Im down in the dungeon diggin up a hole
Imma crawl in and just let things go
Try to get away from all the pain that seems to come to me
I wanna just die, run away or just fuckin scream
theres nothing that makes me happy when im like this
I feel like theres no way out I just gotta cut my wrists
I cut my wrists again
I didn't mean to hurt you again
Im sorry that I killed you within
I swear ill never do it again
Destruction inside me thats tearing me up
But it just seems nobody gives a fuck
Try and try to be as nice as I can
But they just go fuck it up again
Cut my wrists across the street
I've been told to go down the road
To finish it off and make it count
But I'd rather come back for another round
Im fuckin cut'n again
Theres noone stoppin me yet
I think im done cuttin myself
But right now..I really can't tell...<-- repeat...fade...
heres another rock type ---
Suicidal
Im suicidal thats right i know
I need to take care of this problem
Somethings get to me that are hard to see
Try to push them away
never seems to work, so I try not to flirt
Drive away all these feelings I wanna keep
Take them far away and toss'em in a trash heep
Im Sucidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyyy
Im suicidal thats for sure
Now would you like to find me a fuckin' cure!
Theres things that get me theres things that dont
I want you to help me but you probably wont
most people cause me to do this
why do you do that you stupid bitch
Im sick of your shit get out of my life
I know Im mad but that shit aint right
Im Suicidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyy
Im suicidal and thats for sure
Now who would like to find me a fuckin' cure!
Nobody knows that nobody cares
Sometimes I just dont think thats fair
I dont wanna kill myself it just comes to that
Because people dont really know how to decide
How to treat me cuz they dont know whats right
So just leave me alone, and get off my case
Dont make me smack you in your face
Im suicidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyy
Im suicidal thats for sure
Now would you like to find me a fuckin' cure?
Give me honest opinions, Thanks!!
DjIce
Oo Wee
I need a lil uh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
uhh uhh ooo wee
I walk in to the club and I look to my left
I see you standing there at the front desk
I give you my bills and I walk right in
lets get this party started over again
clubs thumpin, ladies is jumpin
got me on tha track and the dj's bumpin
spinnin them tables and rockin a beat
see the bitches gettin low to the beat
I need a lil uhh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
hoppin around gettin my groove on
get to goin and they change the song
start a new beat and dance with yer feat
errbody's dancin nigga can'tchu see
turn around here and feel the vibe
it lets you know that your still alive
ladies grindin, and wearin their diamonds
flashin their bling like it matters to your highness
I need a lil uhh uhh ooo weee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
ooo weee ooo weee ooo wee, need a lil uhh uhh ooo wee
Theres one, Unfinished, I dont' know what to put for the 3rd verse
Heres another. Not Hip-Hop THough, more on the Rock Side for the next couple.
Cut Myself
I told you once and I told you twice
I probably will cut myself tonight
Depressions taken over, and thats for sure
I wanna find out baby if theres a cure
for this pain that I feel in side every time
You come around and start to cry
I said I wont cut my self
But Im going through a livin hell
I'll try not to cut myself
To get out of this deceptive hell
Im down in the dungeon diggin up a hole
Imma crawl in and just let things go
Try to get away from all the pain that seems to come to me
I wanna just die, run away or just fuckin scream
theres nothing that makes me happy when im like this
I feel like theres no way out I just gotta cut my wrists
I cut my wrists again
I didn't mean to hurt you again
Im sorry that I killed you within
I swear ill never do it again
Destruction inside me thats tearing me up
But it just seems nobody gives a fuck
Try and try to be as nice as I can
But they just go fuck it up again
Cut my wrists across the street
I've been told to go down the road
To finish it off and make it count
But I'd rather come back for another round
Im fuckin cut'n again
Theres noone stoppin me yet
I think im done cuttin myself
But right now..I really can't tell...<-- repeat...fade...
heres another rock type ---
Suicidal
Im suicidal thats right i know
I need to take care of this problem
Somethings get to me that are hard to see
Try to push them away
never seems to work, so I try not to flirt
Drive away all these feelings I wanna keep
Take them far away and toss'em in a trash heep
Im Sucidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyyy
Im suicidal thats for sure
Now would you like to find me a fuckin' cure!
Theres things that get me theres things that dont
I want you to help me but you probably wont
most people cause me to do this
why do you do that you stupid bitch
Im sick of your shit get out of my life
I know Im mad but that shit aint right
Im Suicidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyy
Im suicidal and thats for sure
Now who would like to find me a fuckin' cure!
Nobody knows that nobody cares
Sometimes I just dont think thats fair
I dont wanna kill myself it just comes to that
Because people dont really know how to decide
How to treat me cuz they dont know whats right
So just leave me alone, and get off my case
Dont make me smack you in your face
Im suicidal thats right I know
Nobody can denyyyy
Im suicidal thats for sure
Now would you like to find me a fuckin' cure?
Give me honest opinions, Thanks!!
DjIce
