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    This original song I wrote after an idea came to me, so I just follow it up. I happen to complete the lyric and now would love to hear some comments and suggests as to structure, especially the chorus. any general thoughts very much welcome.


    She's So Sweet
    2018 Irwin Abrigo


    (Chorus)
    She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
    when she speaks, Like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
    when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
    She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, But she doesn't know

    (V1)
    She'd passes my way
    it was a lovely day
    She was looking for directions
    that cause my love and affection
    When she looked into my eyes
    and started asking questions
    she didn't know what she'd done that day
    When she'd left and gone away

    (Chorus)
    She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
    when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
    when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
    She left a picture in my memory And I love her so, But she doesn't know

    (V2)
    You'll say I'm insane,
    for her, I'll take that blame
    I don't know her name or number
    So baby if you do remember
    In that moment that we'd share
    why don't you come and talk to me
    This feeling I'm feeling inside
    Is only you can bring a relief

    (Chorus)
    She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
    when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
    when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
    She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, But she doesn't know

    (Bridge)
    Now She's the only girl, in this whole wide world
    that I'm thinking of
    Now She's the only one, in this whole wide world
    That I think I love, she's the only girl that I'm thinking of

    (Chorus)
    She so sweet Her eyes are so lovely
    when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
    when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
    She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, I want her to know
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    I think you forgot to attach the song.

    Edit: My mistake. I thought this was the mp3 forum. Ignore me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by VomitHatSteve View Post
    I think you forgot to attach the song.

    Edit: My mistake. I thought this was the mp3 forum. Ignore me.
    Hi VomitHatSteve, I do have a rough recording of this song and as soon as I am kindy satisfy that it is sounding a little smoother then I will make a post here for you guys to listen.

    What do you think about the lyric?

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    The lyrics seem fine. I'm never much one for analyzing lyrics outside the actual song tho. Nothing leapt out as particularly bad.

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