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    These are lyrics to a verse

    My flow is irrelevant
    Verbal control for the hell of it
    God my rhymes make me sick
    Cause my words are dead
    They O.D. on lies that fed
    On natures calling
    I am falling
    In to white rapids of the appalling
    I scream for the touches of hands belonging
    To satans only missing calling
    My eyes grow tired for her

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gibbo1065 View Post
    These are lyrics to a verse
    I'm glad you told us that.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gibbo1065 View Post
    God my rhymes make me sick
    May not be much hope for the rest of us, then.

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    What do you mean

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    Well, if you've written from the heart and you admit that your rhymes make you sick, then you might just find others agreeing and being pretty savage.
    Truth be told though, I was being lighthearted. It's pretty difficult to critique lyrics without music.
    By the way, your opening post doesn't tell or ask anyone anything.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gibbo1065 View Post
    These are lyrics to a verse

    My flow is irrelevant
    Verbal control for the hell of it
    God my rhymes make me sick
    Cause my words are dead
    They O.D. on lies that fed
    On natures calling
    I am falling
    In to white rapids of the appalling
    I scream for the touches of hands belonging
    To satans only missing calling
    My eyes grow tired for her
    That's nice. So what you do want from us? Approval? Detrimental comments? Follow-up freestyles?

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    Your flow's so sick? Man call me West Nile
    Cuz i make dudes like you over heat wit denial
    You say your flows the shit? bet i can top that pile
    cuz im izzy baby.. i stay so clean like my file?

    haha, no one else did so i went in xD lol. Its hard to know what kind of flow is happening with out a beat, but yeah you got anything recorded? would love to hear somethin

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    Rhymes so sick they call all of my shit the bird flu
    didnt think a verse could make me puke untill I heard you
    your rhymes sicken me, wearin suits made in italy,
    silk lining hand stitched by a taylor
    made for fittin me---sincerely---
    accept responsibility, your lyrically unacceptable
    seriously drop the mic, to emcees you be edible
    your intilectual lack of progress has your words overdosed
    they dead in a casket and now your only hopes a ghost
    my flow is dope but I hate to say that Im ballin
    remove the gun from my pants and the wad of cash when natures callin
    hangin at the club flowin like the white rapids
    come to fuck my night up no idea what might happen
    the hands belongin to the fans all wantin a touch
    Im the fuck up out the buildin and im poppin the clutch

    awww yea call me no-flow the type text wall artist
    Last edited by hiphop24360; 12-04-2011 at 09:20.

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