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    Hey everybody
    its been a while since i have posted, I wrote these lyrics today and would love to hear some opinions on it. The idea of the song came to me last night when I had an arrangement buzzing in my mind. The chorus of the song should probably be a bit longer but anyway, all feedback is welcome.

    v1:
    spare your words cause I cant hear them
    though I'm standing next to you
    save your smiles cause I cant see them
    I'm too far away to care

    pre chorus:
    so do your thing
    and I'll stick to mine
    there is no miracle
    no hidden gold to find

    so do your thing
    and I'll stick to mine
    we work hard night and day
    while we waste our time

    chorus:
    I'm tired of the slip stream
    yeah I'm tired of this slip stream

    v2:
    you want to talk about things that matter
    like what's new on TV
    but I can't tell you what your' after
    and I won't wait to see

    prechorus:
    so do your thing
    and I'll stick to mine
    we work hard night and day
    while we waste our time

    so do your thing
    and I'll stick to mine
    we have no common ground
    or sudden love to find

    chorus:
    I'm tired of the slip stream
    yeah I'm tired of this slip stream

    instrumental section

    chorus

    instrumental section leads to "chaos"

    end

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    It seems to meter out OK

    I confess that I really don't understand what you're trying to say. I'm an old guy, it might be a generational thing.

    Good luck to you
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    Not clear on the reference to Slip Stream.

    Liked the evolving pre-chorus.
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