new lyrics

[newbiewriter]

Hey everybody
its been a while since i have posted, I wrote these lyrics today and would love to hear some opinions on it. The idea of the song came to me last night when I had an arrangement buzzing in my mind. The chorus of the song should probably be a bit longer but anyway, all feedback is welcome.

v1:
spare your words cause I cant hear them
though I'm standing next to you
save your smiles cause I cant see them
I'm too far away to care

pre chorus:
so do your thing
and I'll stick to mine
there is no miracle
no hidden gold to find

so do your thing
and I'll stick to mine
we work hard night and day
while we waste our time

chorus:
I'm tired of the slip stream
yeah I'm tired of this slip stream

v2:
you want to talk about things that matter
like what's new on TV
but I can't tell you what your' after
and I won't wait to see

prechorus:
so do your thing
and I'll stick to mine
we work hard night and day
while we waste our time

so do your thing
and I'll stick to mine
we have no common ground
or sudden love to find

chorus:
I'm tired of the slip stream
yeah I'm tired of this slip stream

instrumental section

chorus

instrumental section leads to "chaos"

end

 

[Milnoque]

It seems to meter out OK

I confess that I really don't understand what you're trying to say. I'm an old guy, it might be a generational thing.

Good luck to you

 

[commanda]

Not clear on the reference to Slip Stream.

Liked the evolving pre-chorus.