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    Mornin' Forum

    I'm gonna' be one the road more or less for a month on a gig that I just signed on for and I won't be posting any new material up for a little while-gonna' be busy. That's a good thing. Working doing what you love-playing music, well it doesn't get much better than that. Anyway.................

    I had been working on this song for awhile. I wrote it for my wife of 20 years, Renee and to tell you the truth, it took 20 years to get it right. I gave it to her as a Valentine's Day gift. (The best Valentine's Day we've ever had) I just wanted to share this song with the forum and as usual, please voice comments. I am really listening to everything you guys suggest and I hope improvements can be heard in each subsequent recording.

    The song is called, "Your Name............" and I think it's the best thing I've done to date. Please take a listen and tell me what you think...again. And if you've ever been with anyone for awhile, you will truly understand the words and the sentiment.


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    Click on the link to "Your Name......."
    "Sometimes Love Has No Rhyme; Has No Reason-even when you try to be cool....." George Duke

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    It's a pretty nice song. There's a cymbal that kinda sticks out. About 10 seconds and again at 49 seconds. (maybe same sample at later parts in the song too). It's not a very good sounding cymbal in my opinion.

    I think the vocal would be better with less effects on it, and a little more to the front.

    Good guitar playing. I think the song needs a bridge in it that you cycle through a couple of times. Something that starts with the 4th of the key and moves a long for about 8 measures.... with a different chord progression and melody.

    Take all this with the understanding that I'm just another musician, with just another opinion.

    Nice job... !

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    Thanks KJamm. From one musician to another, your comments are the ones I give the most validity to. I've been told that the song needs some harmonies. What type of harmony is needed? Something "blocked" or something more "fugal" in nature? Something more 4 part or more focused like a tenor choir type harmony, etc. Looking for suggestions. Thanks for the listen!
    "Sometimes Love Has No Rhyme; Has No Reason-even when you try to be cool....." George Duke

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    I just listened to it again. You know... what I would do is this.... I'd pick out about 3 lines during the verse that you could sing harmony with... I mean influential lines. (I think I could tell you which lines need the emphasis) Then on the chorus I'd find a gal that is part soprano and part alto who can go in and out of harmony and unison. Soft airy voice that compliments yours. I think that would be pretty cool. And if you could get her to do a few ooohhh ahhhs during the guitar part. Just a few tastefully parts. That would work well.

    I know a lady that could do it really well.

    That's what I'd do for vocals. But it sounds pretty darn good as it is.

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    I'm assuming that it's the MP3 encoding (It's sounds pretty swishy and sort of on the muddy side), but it sounds like there's a pretty cool mix in there.

    Agreed on the cymbal... Almost sounds like a hi-hat cymbal on a stand... If you could keep it less "out front" it would be cool...

    Holy cow! Whole mix just changed on a dime at around 3:10... Got really compressed... Gotta play that part again... Yup - It's there... Something suddenly bypassed on the drum buss perhaps?

    Nice tune... I especially like the "not going back to the root chord" thing at the end... That's the kind of thing that stands out.

    John Scrip - www.massivemastering.com

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