Here is my take on it....I think you did a nice job on the tearing apart and putting back togather. I understand this is something to practice with. Why not take a piece of your own though, or one that is not yet an established work of art to work with? I mean, it seems a bit ....I don't know how to put it. Like if someone took the Mona Lisa, and rearranged it how they wanted it to be. You are in a way, making a statement you can do it better. I am not much on covers anyway. I do like some, but definately prefer to listen to someones original work. I am fascinated by it. I do love the way you inserted the preacher....but, NIN would have a fit perhaps!!
Are you a musician, or do you only engineer? If you only engineer, then may I suggest that you find some of us here, whom may be willing to let you work with one of our songs? One that is not established as finished yet?
Sorry if I have angered you. I am not good at wording some things. My remarks are taken the wrong way sometimes....most of the time.
If you are a musician, I would love to hear your own creation and what you can do with it, using your engineering skills, which seem to be very good.