A song about songwriting

Strat1958

Strat1958

Late-blooming songwriter!
Hey all, I just wrote a quick little ditty about songwriting.

This is kinda the first draft - I know it needs filling out. I was going for a sort of rockabilly vibe; something I've not done before.

I left space for a guitar solo after the 2nd chorus...still trying to figure out what it should sound like. Thinking a clean sound with some slapback on it.
EDIT #1: Guitar solo was added
EDIT #2: B3 organ and vibes added

Anywho...here it is. (updated version)

I WANT TO WRITE A SONG

I Want To Write A Song
© Mike Pilling 2019

V1
Rented a house in old Cape Cod
Try to inspire myself
I had so many parts of songs
In a book up on the shelf

Maybe with the wind and waves
A song will fly into my head
A spark will fire the creative muse
That seems to have dropped dead

CH
I want to write a song
One that everybody hums
I want to get the message out
But my mind has just gone numb

I want to write that next great tune
Wanna hear it on the radio
I know it’s in there somewhere
Just gotta let it grow
Let it grow

V2
So I wrote some stuff about seabirds
And the boats across the bay
The ordinary things you see
On an ordinary day

But you know it didn’t take too long
For me to realize
The inspiration’s everywhere
You just gotta use your eyes

CH
I want to write a song
One that everybody hums
I want to get the message out
But my mind has just gone numb

I want to write that next great tune
Wanna hear it on the radio
I know it’s in there somewhere
Just gotta let it grow
Let it grow
Yeah let it grow
 
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You just feeling it out? Song seems a bit premature for the mix clinic. It seems more like it's in preproduction stages.

I like the lyrics. Although seabirds and boats in the bay are not 'ordinary' things people see on an 'ordinary' day. Lol. :D

I think the melody when delivering the lyrics could use a bit of work. Don't know what exactly, but something bugs me about the way the verse lines end.

But overall I think you're onto a good start.
But preproduction is where you're at. (Imho)
:D

Edit: oh, ps. I would do the double chorus in your second chorus instead of the first.

Just do the half chorus, and get into the verse with some kind of musical hook in there.
Save the double chorus till later. Let the song build up.
 
RFR said:
You just feeling it out? Song seems a bit premature for the mix clinic. It seems more like it's in preproduction stages.

I like the lyrics. Although seabirds and boats in the bay are not 'ordinary' things people see on an 'ordinary' day. Lol. :D

I think the melody when delivering the lyrics could use a bit of work. Don't know what exactly, but something bugs me about the way the verse lines end.

But overall I think you're onto a good start.
But preproduction is where you're at. (Imho)
:D

Edit: oh, ps. I would do the double chorus in your second chorus instead of the first.

Just do the half chorus, and get into the verse with some kind of musical hook in there.
Save the double chorus till later. Let the song build up.
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All great ideas!
Thanks for listening, I appreciate the feedback.

RFR said:
You just feeling it out? Song seems a bit premature for the mix clinic. It seems more like it's in preproduction stages.
Click to expand...

Yeah, I posted it here as a basic track, hoping to get a couple of ideas for filling it out. Once I do that, hopefully will get some ideas on a good final mix. Thanks again :thumbs up:
 
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Interesting. I like the guitar addition. Would be nice to hear more of that. I agree with RFR about letting the song build up. I think some drum variation during the chorus sections would help.
 
Still rough but I think the solo section is cool. I don't really know how to describe it other than with the first thing to pop into my mind. ...... and I quote my own exact thoughts. :D
Wow! What a fun solo. :D
 
Finished, just need suggestions on the mix

Finally got the last couple of tracks recorded (B3 organ and vibes). Thanks in advance for any ideas to improve the mix.

This is my song about writing songs :D

I WANT TO WRITE A SONG
 
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