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    Sitting on the Egde of the World...It doesn't get much cornier than this.

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    OK, so I had a phrase in my head "Sitting on the Edge of the World", and actually started a thread in the song writing forum asking if there's already a popular song with this title.

    Anyway, I went ahead and wrote a song with it anyway. I also got the video bug a few weeks ago after making my first video. I had the idea that I want to do a black and white video next time. So, I thought I'd need a tune that would suit black and white, and then I thought, what better type of tune for black and white than a 60's-ish pop tune. I even ordered 4 60's wigs for the split-screen video I want to do.

    I ended up writing and recording this in the 2 days since I got the idea. It turns out that his is probably the corniest and "happiest" tune I've ever written. It's fun, but it's not really my usual style, so I'm a little out of my comfort zone here.

    Let me know hat you think. I'm probably posting this too soon, because I'm sure if I let it sit for a few days, I'd hear a lot of flaws that I don't hear right now. So, lay it on me.

    EDGE OF THE WORLD

    Edge of the World (Words and music by RAMI)

    Sometimes you find yourself in the middle of nowhere,
    And sometimes in the middle of nowhere, you find yourself
    The whole world keeps on turning so let it turn you on
    Taking my time and taking it easy because everything comes around and around

    Chorus:
    Just breathing the sound in the air
    Just staying right here there everywhere
    Just getting high again
    Sitting on the edge of the world

    Mangled misconceptions messed my muddled mind much more
    And I got no more meaningless alliteration to share but who cares

    Chorus:
    Just breathing the sound in the air
    Just staying right here there everywhere
    Just getting high again
    Sitting on the edge of the world

    Chorus:
    Just breathing the sound in the air
    Just staying right here there everywhere
    Just getting high again
    Sitting on the edge of the world
    Just breathing the sound in the air
    Just getting high again
    Sitting on the edge of the world
    Just getting high again
    Sitting on the edge of the world
    Sitting on the edge of the world
    Sitting on the edge of the edge of the edge of the edge of the edge of the world
    Last edited by RAMI; 06-29-2015 at 13:52.

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    RAMI,
    I'm reading as the track downloads - slow service in my area.
    The 1st verse is classic pun/cyclical philosophy stuff/
    A touch of Beatles gentle psych to the words indeed.
    I enjoyed the song.
    The solo was good and I like the idea of a low note jobbie though the tone of the guitar and bass seemed to meld on a couple of notes in my head phones.
    Keyboard skills are coming along nicely - they fit in well.
    A happy RAMI track? Well, it worked because the word play was there as usual.

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    Wow, this is quite the departure from your normal style. It took a moment to shift gears and get into the gist of the song. I wouldn't call it corny, I would call it 'laid back'. I can almost smell the.... 'aroma'. I like the lyrics in the first verse. You've always got a nice way of weaving words.

    Mix-wise, only my opinion, I find the right channel guitar kind of out there by itself and doesn't fit with the rest of the song.
    OH's seem further apart than you normally do.
    There seems to be some conflict between the solo guitar and the bass right after the solo starts.
    Singing feels uncomfortable at first but you loosen up by the first chorus.

    and of course, those classic Rami harmonies. nice.

    yeah man,

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    Quote Originally Posted by rayc View Post
    RAMI,
    I'm reading as the track downloads - slow service in my area.
    The 1st verse is classic pun/cyclical philosophy stuff/
    A touch of Beatles gentle psych to the words indeed.
    I enjoyed the song.
    The solo was good and I like the idea of a low note jobbie though the tone of the guitar and bass seemed to meld on a couple of notes in my head phones.
    Keyboard skills are coming along nicely - they fit in well.
    A happy RAMI track? Well, it worked because the word play was there as usual.
    Quote Originally Posted by Chili View Post
    Wow, this is quite the departure from your normal style. It took a moment to shift gears and get into the gist of the song. I wouldn't call it corny, I would call it 'laid back'. I can almost smell the.... 'aroma'. I like the lyrics in the first verse. You've always got a nice way of weaving words.

    Mix-wise, only my opinion, I find the right channel guitar kind of out there by itself and doesn't fit with the rest of the song.
    OH's seem further apart than you normally do.
    There seems to be some conflict between the solo guitar and the bass right after the solo starts.
    Singing feels uncomfortable at first but you loosen up by the first chorus.

    and of course, those classic Rami harmonies. nice.

    yeah man,
    Really cool. Thanx guys. I was expecting at least a few issues since I really did post this pretty much right after finishing it.

    I can address all that. I think I need a compressor on the solo guitar to help it stand out from the bass. I'll also try to bring that guitar way out on the right in a little bit.

    Thanx guys.

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    ray c already mentioned it, but I love the first couple of lines man. find yourself in the middle of nowhere/ in the middle of nowhere you find yourself...
    That's a great lyric.

    I thought it sounded good and I enjoyed it. it's a superb sounding recording of a great song in my opinion.
    I was country before they took the O out.

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    Needed to listen twice through to get over the shock of a RAMI song that doesn't sound like a RAMI song.

    If the big moving picture studios ever decide to bring back the beach party flick, this track is a shoe in for the opening credits, complete with freeze frames on all the stars of the movie frolicking on the beach with frisbees and surfboards. Hey... video idea? Do it! It would be perfect for this tune.

    I'm not hearing anything that isn't totally subjective, RAMI, and even then, it's really just the lead guitar part that I'd bring up a little bit. Maybe a bit of a delay on the lead guitar to give it an ever so slightly "floatier" ambiance. Not an audible delay, just one of those that fills out the vibe.

    I think this is great. The vocal harmonies are really perfect. Nice keys too. This was a pleasant surprise, man. Cool track.
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    What can I say, I get a kick out of stupidity, so I have no problem entertaining myself.

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    Quote Originally Posted by jimistone View Post
    ray c already mentioned it, but I love the first couple of lines man. find yourself in the middle of nowhere/ in the middle of nowhere you find yourself...
    That's a great lyric.

    I thought it sounded good and I enjoyed it. it's a superb sounding recording of a great song in my opinion.
    Quote Originally Posted by kindafishy View Post
    Needed to listen twice through to get over the shock of a RAMI song that doesn't sound like a RAMI song.

    If the big moving picture studios ever decide to bring back the beach party flick, this track is a shoe in for the opening credits, complete with freeze frames on all the stars of the movie frolicking on the beach with frisbees and surfboards. Hey... video idea? Do it! It would be perfect for this tune.

    I'm not hearing anything that isn't totally subjective, RAMI, and even then, it's really just the lead guitar part that I'd bring up a little bit. Maybe a bit of a delay on the lead guitar to give it an ever so slightly "floatier" ambiance. Not an audible delay, just one of those that fills out the vibe.

    I think this is great. The vocal harmonies are really perfect. Nice keys too. This was a pleasant surprise, man. Cool track.
    Thanx so much, guys. Fishy, as you were typing, I uploaded a new version and did exactly what you said. Funny, exactly what you said, I turned up the lead, and put a slight delay on it. I also put a compressor on it so that the attack of the notes comes through a bit more. I was going for a "And I Love Her" solo vibe there.

    I also brought in that rythm guitar on the right a little bit.

    I really appreciate all the comments.

    I'm glad you guys like those first lines in the song. Funny thing, I get a kick out of the second verse, because it's so stupid:

    "Mangled misconceptions messed my muddled mind much more
    And I got no more meaningless alliteration to share but who cares"

    I actually laughed when I wrote it, and had to try singing it a couple of times without laughing. What can I say, I get a kick out of stupidity, so I have no problem entertaining myself.

    Thanx a lot guys.

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    Happy new sig day!
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    What can I say, I get a kick out of stupidity, so I have no problem entertaining myself.

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    Excellent quality as always. Great clarity. Great harmonies. Lead vocal sounds pretty dang nice too. I like that rhythmic little guitar line sort off to the right.

    Snare is just a smidge loud. I'd back off the reverb a bit. But I always say that.

    The guitar in the middle solo is a bit muddy. I'm thinking a little notch somewhere around 300hz would clean that up nicely. You might also want to play with a cut lower down - like in the 120hz range. Just something there that sounds a little tubby.

    IMO the bass is a good 2 db too loud.

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    Quote Originally Posted by kindafishy View Post
    Happy new sig day!
    HAHA! Classic.

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