You definitetly need to deal with the bass - there's too much booming around for a broadcast.
The guitar line that starts at about 2.10 is mixed too low - radio needs hooks & that hook is buried.
Yep, that's about it. good work, good song, nice dynamic but
a) BASS - it appears to be in stereo in my 'phones and pressured not out of phase as tehre's plenty of bass sound that is not defined, boomy, and actually doesn't suggest a real bass was used - could easily be bass from the guitars.
b) guitar line lift - the general guitar sound is a tad generic but not standard NWOHMetal pedal style.
Cheers
rayC