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I gave it a listen. My comments:
The piano melody in the end (the one by itself) is really great! It's a shame that it doesn't appear again in any other part of the song. I think it's the best part. The drums sounded a little off beat (I realize that's hard on a keyboard). I think you should just sequence them (if you have the capability). I also don't like the bass drum sound too much, it doesn't sound full enough (like all of the sound is in a very small frequency range.) W-I-Z is right: compress the vocals more (or at all). It wil make the singing sound much more professional. The distorted electric guitar (the one playing chords) sounded a bit out of place. I think it needs to be more dimensional, maybe double it... or even better: do the old stereo trick. Mic the amp with 2 different mics (unless you're amps are modeled in a program, then use two different amp models) and pan the two tracks full left and full right. Delay them by about 10 ms. I like how the voices work together in the song. The strings in the end are really cool, but a little too loud. Hope my comments help!