Oh boy, a sigh of relief. I really liked the song, but I didn't know if it would fly with other listeners. You all inspire me more than anything. I just got home from a gig to all these posts, and I want to respond.
Track Rat--Thanks! Yeah, this one pretty much hinges on the lyrics. I'm glad you heard 'em!
James Argo--pretty much everything you said I agree with. Those are pretty much the same production values I want to go for in the final version.
SluiCe--I think there are a couple of sports where more dynamics could actually enhance the lyrics. There's some underlying anger in some of the lyrics that could be brought out with a little rise here and there. I hope you like the finished version!I have been working on computer so long putting things together, I made a conscious decision to get complete songs that worked with vocal/guitar first. So I did that and added stuff just to get an IDEA of what the final thing might sound like. So from here, I'll build a solid drum track and add to that.
Kramer--You're just too kind! Listen, I'm gonna PM you about your message, OK?
JR#97--Its not anything for sale yet! The strings were the Yamaha Motif. Just got it and was kind of learning the board. Anyway, I'm hoping to make a record with this included--new final version-- if all goes well.
ChrisHarris--OK. I'll wait for the PM. Yes, the other song "You've Got A Home" was for my son, who left for school last fall. I've also got one for the wife--so, one for each of my family members. Damn, I'm all warm and fuzzy now!
erichenryus--The songs are what matters first to me, so I deeply appreciate what you said. Yes, the timings are not real tight, but I didn't know that until I started adding things! I was hoping I might get lucky, but this served the purpose of being able to step back and hear the song. Now, I have to get a click and and do a tight version, trying to improve on all aspects.
Sydfan--I thought you might like that line! I actually thought about it.
Smokepole--Thank you! Your listen is much appreciated.
darwinsdoggy--I agree--its the lyrics that carry this one. Part of my next task is to make the music stand up as strong as the lyrics. Thank you, my friend!
michael.butler--thanks!
flash2ace--Once upon a time, I di get paid for writing, but there is a trap in that for me. What happens is you get pressured into writing a "hit" (like anybody knows what that really means until it happens). In the process, you can tend to drift away from writing about what really means something to you in favor of what you think the public wants to hear. I guess its all good, but I have been drawn into writing more from personal feelings lately and maybe thats what I should have done all along! It seems like the songs are working better for me that way. By the way, I love sharing the music. I live for it and appreciate all the feedback very much.