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    Hi People,
    this is a first draft version of a song I've had kicking around for over a year. Somehow my pastor got hold of an unfinished version and included it with a powerpoint presentation last week .. without telling me. It was weird listening to it and thinking ... "hey this sounds alright"..."I wonder who it is ?"... then the singing started... "wait a minute that's me !!" Anyway it prompted me to try and finish the tune.

    What you hear in this version is a few experiments into doing a virtual choir. I'm not entirely sure if it works .. but it was fun to do.

    As usual if anyone feels they'd like to contribute in a collaboration just pm me. And all comments/constructive critisism is greatly appreciated.

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    "Praises Mk1"

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    Great guitar sound! Nice feel too.

    All those voices are you? Pretty cool.

    I think you've got a potential Hillsongs hit there. I'd clean up some of the vocs ( a few missed notes, gargled notes, etc.) - but definitely a nice blend - how many lines did you have going at once? For the most part, they didn't seem to walk on each other.

    Lyrically, a strong message, but maybe a bit prosaic. Not that it HAS to rhyme, but you don't want to sound like a theology lesson. I thought "by being obedient to You" was kind of a letdown after a big buildup. But I havent been able to write a P&W chorus yet without making it turn into something else - so you're already a step ahead of me.

    You mentioned a collab - what were you looking to add/change?

    Anyhow, cool song. My old teen choir would've liked it a lot.

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    Overall it sounds good.

    I think I see where your trying to go with those backing vocals, and it's cool. However they tend to get a bit too busy note-wise in a few places, and the phrasing needs to be tighter for it to work well.

    You need to let the lead vocal be the lead, and keep the backing vocals out of the way.

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    Thanks dafduc for listening. Glad you like the guitar sound ... spent quite a bit of time on that ... it's very difficult to get it sounding really good ... 3 years recording later and I think I'm just getting there. There are 5 vocal tracks in total... 3 main melody and 2 harmonies. Can you be specific about what times you think the vocal is sloppy... I'd like to fix it and it's hard to be objective whith your own music.

    The lyrics ... well is almost solely based on John Ch 15 so if it sounds like a theology lesson then bingo .. it is. "by being obediant to you (God)" is exactly the whole point of the passage so I don't think I can change that without changing history. Your response is a text book chistian response ... and one that Jesus intended to address in this passage. Confused ? pm me.

    Collaborations ? well maybe it needs drums to rock it up ? maybe it needs different voices in the virtual choir ? maybe it need piano or electric guitar ? you deceide and let me know.

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    Originally posted by M.Brane
    Overall it sounds good.

    You need to let the lead vocal be the lead, and keep the backing vocals out of the way.
    Thanks for listening M.Brane. Can you be specific with times in the MP3 where you think the vocals step on each other... I think I know what you mean but it would really help to know exactly which places.

    Cheers

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    Cool song...I think it could easily fit into a Hosannah Praise album.....they would rock it up of course with a full drum kit,electric guitars,keys and tons more voices.LOL...this is a really good song...I agree about the line "by being obedient to you".It IS the Central theme of the song and delivers the message that obedience(actions) speak louder than words(Praise with just lip service)....Like Jesus said,"If you love me you'll keep my commandments",BUT, you might wanna try the line "When we're obedient to you" in place of "by being obedient to you"...it's a lot more singable than "By being"..."By being" sounds kinda funny when it's sung....sing it really quick and the 2 words sound like another language.LOL.....if this is gonna be sung in church along with praise and worship it will work i think.......if you do get a chance to sing this at church with a congregation try singing it both ways and see which line flows better.......ok,I'll shut up about YOUR song.

    I really like it.

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    Really like where this is heading.Backing vocals sound great dres as does your lead. I'll wanna hear this again when you add anything. Good stuff man.

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    Thanks Kramer, I think your lyric suggestion is great .. your right it is a lot easier to sing and doesn't detract from the meaning at all... thanks. Now I'll have to retrack all those vocals .. never mind .. it's a lot of fun (untill your voice gives up )

    David : Thanks for listening... glad you like it

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    Dres,

    Another suggestion regarding that lyric.LOL.....I think the phrase "by OUR Obedience to you" would work just fine.....The 2 words beginning with "B" are what makes it a little weird as far as singability goes.Just a thought.
    Last edited by Kramer; 03-02-2003 at 16:27.

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    I loved it, dres!! I have nothing to add, i am really diggin the vocal work! sound's real BIG! guitar is nice and spacious, i would love to hear some drum's in there. Or maybe even something as simple as conga's of bongo's, keep the shaker, i liked it!



    Thank's man!

    Peace

    Rick

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