New Song

[Lzeppelin67]

hello internet users. i have a song that i would like critqued. If you could check it out and tell me anything thats wrong with it that would be great and if you like tell me too, any feedback is good feedback. Well heres the link and thank you for your time

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/?aid=3469/album798

 

[Oobleck42]

I really like what the guitar and bass are up to. Very interesting. The vocals could use some work, though. Also the drums are kind of hard to hear. If it were my song I would consider turning it into an instrumental. I'm hearing good sounds overall, though.