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    Smile My Very First Love Song

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    It is a tender, heart-warming ballad.

    Any advice on re-mixing it, additional instruments, etc.
    would be heeded.

    Thank you for your time...

    I love you.



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    "You Make Me Sick"

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    Those are all love songs though, aren't they Doug? (dl'ing )

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    Dougie is my favorite jangly pop songwriter. Is this the same as the CD, or do I need to download it?

    Daf

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    Thumbs up

    Really nice recording doo-gie. Better than the stuff on your disc... only thing bothering me about the recording ? The D.I. sounding gtr...

    Would like to hear actual drums from you ... since we all know you're a friggin monster on th'skins.

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    C

    (I'm out of ka-o-pec-tate )

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    Hey daf!: Thank you for the gratuitous comment on my work.
    That's what I love about friends...

    It's the same one as on your CD, daf...

    I posted it here to see what can be fixed/re-done for the better with it.


    Party Inda Pants: Maybe the difference in quality is because this tune was recorded on an ADAT unit, and was not bombarded with effects. Thanks for the criticism on the DI'd guitar.
    I should re-record it miked, huh?


    VI

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    Damn that was funny. "It was leaving or heaving, so I had to pick. I love you my darling buy you make me sick." Just a couple of the great lines. "You'll get over me, I'll get over these allergies." Some more good stuff.

    Liked some of those little bass licks.

    Not sure about the coughing and other sound effects (was it puking) at the end. To me the song should stay "pretty" all the way through.

    Soft harmonies just doing "ahs" over the chord progression would be nice in the pre-chorus.

    I didn't think the DI'd guitar sound worked in this case. A good old mic'd acoustic would work better IMO.

    This reminded me of the Brady Bunch episode where they thought Jan was allergic to Tiger. But then everything in my life can be retold in a Brady Bunch rerun.

    Loved the song.

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    Not to turn this into a mutual admiration society thread, but it definitely is a good thing when Triple M likes my lyrics.

    That guy is my favorite lyricist around here, and I swear if I ever move to Chicago, I would bum-rush my way into Marsha Marsha Marsha.

    So where do you think I should add the ahhs? during the turnaround, or during the verses? I'd like to try rhat.

    The coughing and wheezing was a spur of the moment addition I added when the "tape" was still rolling on the vocal take.
    I suppose it sounds a little disgusting...I'll edit that out on my next take and see what it does.

    Thanksfor the listen, Triple M...PM me when you post something new. Sometimes I don't see everything people post until it's 3 pages deep.



    VI

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    I'm at work right now but, I will definitely check it out this evening!

    Cheers!

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    Hey if you come to Chicago look me up. You can bum-rush MMM anytime.

    Regarding the "ahs" I'm hearing them come in at about :33 on the line "It kills me to say this..." and similarly with the line "It was leaving or heaving..." at 1:16. Then a regular three part on the tag line: "I love you my darling..."

    I just noticed you doubled some vox. I guess I was paying too much attention to the words the first time. I like the doubled vox - if it were me, I'd have them doubled all the way through. That's just me though.

    One last thing... there is no way this qualifies as a love song. Please never write one of those. They're boring.

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    ROFLWTIME!!! Goodun Douglas!!! Did you write this before or after your wife left???

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