My Carnival

Retrohazard

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Going to take one more stab at this mix......any issues I should be aware of?

Thanks!

My Carnival Jan 14 Master Mp3 by Ricky Layne | Free Listening on SoundCloud



My Carnival

Sit back
Don't relax
I drink fear
You wonder
What's coming next
I'll make it clear
You're screams can't save you now
These games you will play for me
Midway merry go round parade

I thrive
on you innocent life
I steal your soul
With precise control
Into despair you slide
Will you survive?

Your trance
At my prance
Is so ideal
Black rose
Seals our romance
Time to yield
Let's cheer for my carnival
This fairground full of tools for me
Fun house Ferris wheel entertain

I thrive
on you innocent life
I steal your soul
With precise control
Into despair you slide
Will you survive?
Ohhh it's doubtful

Welcome to my world
I take what I want
While your bemused
I'm in control
but I can't stop
once I'm amused
A maze of mirrors
You can't escape
Reality sets in
You lose

I thrive
on you innocent life
I steal your soul
With precise control
Into despair you slide
Will you survive?
My carnival
 
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I thought the singer had a cool voice.

I thought the low end sounded good for the genre. It was a little sterile sounding, but for this genre it sounded good.

The one thing I thought needed addressing was there was not a solid pad instrument. It's like there was a sonic hole around 1K - 2K. There was a bunch of low end and a bunch of high end. But not enough in the center to fill the mix out.
 
It's a pretty cool track. Reminds me a bit of Franz Ferdinand. I like the tones you're using, the bottom end is solid, everything seems well balanced and the vocals are great. I can't suggest any improvements. Nice job
 
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