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    ok this is not mixed just moved the faders on the d.a.w. im trying to get a feel from you guys as to what should stay or go ..material wise....i have a coupla new lines for the re-write ...but i would like to get your opinion ...mostly on the intro and the end....chad (participant)...has offered to do the drums as he has killer drum sounds...well maybe after he hears this he wont we'll see..lol....and chris harris played the solo....very well i might add...fuck i wish i could play like that....anyway just let me know what you think.im gonna do a total redo pretty much just wanted to fix any MAJOR misshaps before hand...

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    This song needs a break or two. It's good but gets a bit repetitive after the 3min mark.

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    i agree about the need for a break, but that's about it. very nice song. can't wait to hear it all put together. nice singing.

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    intro seems fine to me.. and a decent enough ruff mix. it seems a little lobsided to me, but for a ruffie, it is just fine. The 2nd verse, bringing in the elec pno sound is good...might make it more noticeable to bring the 2nd verse up over the 1st verse. Kick the H outta the chorus too. Big wiiiiide vocals would be great. Lead is good, but too much echo, but I like the melodic vein rather than the notes for notes sake kinda thing....so keeping it 'simple' would be the way to go [for me]. maybe the solo could solo over a bridge?...then drop back down...or start fading earlier. your ending works ok too, but comes on a little abrupt for some reason. ... and high freq. noise at the end?? intentional?

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    Hey Jamal,
    .........cool tune man!!! Hey this sounds like a great collab in the makin. . I hear what brane is saying about the break...... but, the constant moving rhythm is kinda cool in a novel kinda way. Im about finished w/ a big ass-clog of a song that im doing so if'n ya could use a bass line, I'ld be happy to jump in.

    .......cool possibilities!!

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    Great song Jamal,the build is killer!

    You asked for opinions on the intro and ending.
    The vox sounds like it needs to come up in the intro,and mabey seperated a litte more from the lead.

    On the ending,I think the pipe sound dosn't fit,how about some BG vocals doing the same thing?
    Mabey repeating he's a fake,he's afraid,were afraid,something along those lines.
    Just an idea.

    I think you have the start of a great song here,looking foward to hearing more!

    Good luck,
    Pete
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    cool...

    mbrane:...more breaks noted.....and repetative as dumb as it sounds was sorta what i was goin for..so altho not intended on your part thanks!..lol

    erichhenryus:..thanks yeah i dont have the vocals skills that you displayed in the 1.5 deal ...man that was great...more breaks..wel shit i guess its becoming a concensus.....damnit..lol

    mixmkr:.."kick the H out of the chorus"...what is "h"???....hihat?..man i was embaressed to put that piano "sound " even in there...it sucks...its a casio..lol..big wiiiiide vocals thats what i was thinkin too..cool."bring the second verse up over the first verse"...that part stumps me too??....

    guernica:..excellent any help you can give in the way of bass is ALWAYS appreciated....and yes you get that its supposed to be sorta "droning"...kinda anyway..thanks G.

    pete:...thank you for taking the time...yeah im going to resing the whole thing i just sang mostly on this version to keep track and try out ideas..like.."you dont want me to drive im just here for the ride" thats coming out..lol.....and the end the "pipe" sound is me singing...but i think ill do that part with the piano..maybe?...


    thanks again...

    jamal

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    Needs a real solo.



    JB - just checkin' your mail here. Mixmkr is right about that 2nd chorus. I think you need to bring in the second git immediately on that one, and go full throttle with all the vocals at the same time.

    Yeah, yeah...I'll sing 'em. LOL. You lazy fuck.

    CHrIShaRrIS - 懢ѱ

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    cool song.. yeah it needs some stuff that others mentioned, but I like it so far.. needs more power.. dig the outro..

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    Originally posted by Jamal Bucket

    erichhenryus:..thanks yeah i dont have the vocals skills that you displayed in the 1.5 deal ...man that was great...more breaks..wel shit i guess its becoming a concensus.....damnit..lol
    maybe a babershop quartet type of break with a washboard abs solo? just kidding. i really do think your vocals are very strong on this. they fit the song perfectly. and this might be your best songwriting yet. it'll be worth every effort you put into it i think. you've got songwriting skills for sure man.

    chris, is that the tubescreaming acoustic guitar on the solo?

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