I will review more songs...

roomx

roomx

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Hmm, I find it strange that so many people get angry about me rating some songs.
Well, I think I'll take it with good humour and make a new thread for it.

Maybe I should start to rate the negative responses as well:

Giving scores from 1 to 10 on:

1. Negativity
2. Language used
3. Humour
4. Originality
5. "I rule this forum" factor
6. General mix of emotions.
 
Reviewing

I will review the first 5 pop/rock songs again. (no metal/hip-hop/classical/instrumentals a.s.o.)

I will only review finished songs.
Pick one of your songs only for critics/reviewing.

Include in your info/reply (links without these will not be reviewed):

1. Working streaming link of one song only:
2. Genre and influences
3. Lyrics.
4. Instruments/ gear used.

I will give scores from 1 to 10 on the following:

1. Melody
2. Vocals
3. Instrumentation
4. Lyrics
5. Quality of mix
6. Overall impression

Looking forward to hear some quality rock and pop.

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R²OS is at:
Streaming 128:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/7/r2osmusic.htm
Download 320:
http://www.r2os.com/r2osmusic1.html
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Hi,

here's my recording : Open Season

1. Working streaming link of one song only:


2. Genre and influences
Tim Mc Graw

3. Lyrics.
VGRSG 1:
Here's to the corners yet to turn
Here's to the bridges yet to burn
Here's to the whole thing blown apart
It's open season on my heart

VGRSG 2:
The days go by like flying bricks
Leave gaping holes too deep to fix
I'd just stay home if I were smart
It's open season on my heart

CHORUS:
I can't blame anyone but me
This reckless fool I've come to be
My tired excuses just don't fit
It don't look good from where I sit

VGRSG 3:
I've tried to change without much luck
I reached the point where I get stuck
I hit the streets and the fireworks start
It's open season on my heart

CHORUS 2:

I can't be something that I'm not
I can't give what I haven't got
I don't know where or why or when
I only know the shape I'm in

VGRSG 4:

So here's to the clown down in the mouth
Here's to the whole thing going south
My own true love's turned poison dart
It's open season on my heart

Here's turning heartaches into art
It's open season on my heart

4. Instruments/ gear used.

Acoustic guitar : Takamine EN-20
Electric Guitar : Fender Telecaster American Deluxe with Steel Bar
Bass : Fender Precision Japan Copy
Drums : VST Plugin : Groove Agent
Microphone : AKG C535
Harmonizing Effect unit : TC-Helicon "VOICE-LIVE"

Cubase SX on Pentium 4/ 3,3Gig, 1G RAM, P4P800 MB,
Waves RVerb
Waves True Verb
Waves Compressor C1, L2, C4
Waves EQ
Guitar-Amp : VST Plugin TC-Thirty

RME Mulitface, RME Quad Mic
TC Electronic Powercore DSP Platform


Best regards
Steve
 
ok, i seem to have gotten over my first mp3 review. so here you go.

1 - link:



2 - genre/influences
pop/rock - maybe the cure is an influence

3 - words
try, i really try, to write a , sticky love song for you
try, to make you cry, but my words aren't swords or sweets and
why, i don't know why, it always comes out minor chords and
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue
sweet romnaticism eludes me
dark clouds throw me down and use me
dig my way out of this pop culture hole
throw me a rope and help me, save my soul
try, i really try, to write a , sticky love song for you
try, to make you cry, but my words aren't swords or sweets and
why, i don't know why, it always comes out minor chords and
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue
supposed to be all flowers and candy
dozen roses vases dandy
it's another kodak moment
picture of my inner torment
try, i really try, to write a , sticky love song for you
try, to make you cry, but my words aren't swords or sweets and
why, i don't know why, it always comes out minor chords and
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue
<lead stuff>
try, i really try, to write a , sticky love song for you
try, to make you cry, but my words aren't swords or sweets and
why, i don't know why, it always comes out minor chords and
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue
feeling kind of blue

4 - instruments/gear

carlos acoustic guitar
epiphone bass
pacifica drum set
sonar

have a good time
Chris
 
roomx said:
Hmm, I find it strange that so many people get angry about me rating some songs.
Well, I think I'll take it with good humour and make a new thread for it.

Maybe I should start to rate the negative responses as well:

Giving scores from 1 to 10 on:

1. Negativity
2. Language used
3. Humour
4. Originality
5. "I rule this forum" factor
6. General mix of emotions.
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I think it's the set of rules you impose that pisses me off. And that you are offering it like a service.

Oh, and fuck :eek: off with that shit :mad: cause "I" fucking rule :p this motherfucker ha ha! :cool:
 
Good question

W.I.S.C. said:
Where do you draw the line between rock and metal? Give some examples...
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ha ha. True. I should not have written that.

I'll review it...
 
HangDawg said:
I think it's the set of rules you impose that pisses me off. And that you are offering it like a service.

Oh, and fuck :eek: off with that shit :mad: cause "I" fucking rule :p this motherfucker ha ha! :cool:
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1. Negativity
5 Could be a lot worse

2. Language used
7 Starts of gently, but then gets better.

3. Humour
6 Humour points to the "I rule ..." factor

4. Originality
3 Could have come up with something better.

5. "I rule this forum" factor
8+ Yes, you gave it almost all you got on this one.

6. General mix of emotions.
4 Onnly angry and sarcastic.

Good luck with your next post.
 
Chugheshc

I'll comment on your song as roomx seems to be more interested in playing bbs politics. (but bear in mind I'm only a bass player ;))

Obviously you need to edit the beginning - problem is it sets the listener to expect something amateurish when it starts with all those clicks and buzzes, not to mention a hihat that goes out of time!

So it's apleasant surprise when it gets going. I quite like your voice (if it's you) and love the phrasing on some of the lines, I am a sucker for that. You need, I think, just to take the edge of the voice, it's a bit harsh and jarring in places, more experienced ears that me might give you some EQ or compression hints.

The drums are nowhere near right, they sound boxy, thin and distant, like they were recorded in the next room.

Otherwise the overall sound lacks mids, it's all muddy bottom and harsh top, sounds like you EQ's the bottom of the guitars to make space for the bass and overdid it. Fluid lead playing which is absolutely spot on for this style - fits well with the vox.

Bass playing needs tightening both in perforamnce and mixing, it's very flabby and doesn't seem to relate to the drums.

So, a mixed bag, it's definitely worth more work though, the song is there.
 
chugheshc said:
ok, i seem to have gotten over my first mp3 review. so here you go.

1 - link:



2 - genre/influences
pop/rock - maybe the cure is an influence

3 - words


4 - instruments/gear

carlos acoustic guitar
epiphone bass
pacifica drum set
sonar

have a good time
Chris
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Rememeber again, these are only my personal, subjective opinions:

1. Melody
6 A nice straight forward pop-rock tune. Nice catchy melody.

2. Vocals
4+ Sounds like you're short of breath, you're to much in a hurry getting the words said. But it has got some nice edges to it. Maybe you can practice opening your mouth more when you sing, and getting the power and air from you gut... Try to be in charge of the song, when you record the vocals.

3. Instrumentation
5 Here I agree with user Garry Sharp (though he is more detailed than me).

4. Lyrics
5 Well, nothing much to say. Guess it's ok.

5. Quality of mix
4+ I'll try to lean on user Garry Sharp again...

6. Overall impression
5++

This one needs a lot of work before it's finished, but the pleasant melody gives it some extra points.
Looking forward to hearing the next version...
 
Re: Open Season

stmoeller60 said:
Hi,

here's my recording : Open Season

1. Working streaming link of one song only:


2. Genre and influences
Tim Mc Graw

3. Lyrics.

4. Instruments/ gear used.

Acoustic guitar : Takamine EN-20
Electric Guitar : Fender Telecaster American Deluxe with Steel Bar
Bass : Fender Precision Japan Copy
Drums : VST Plugin : Groove Agent
Microphone : AKG C535
Harmonizing Effect unit : TC-Helicon "VOICE-LIVE"

Cubase SX on Pentium 4/ 3,3Gig, 1G RAM, P4P800 MB,
Waves RVerb
Waves True Verb
Waves Compressor C1, L2, C4
Waves EQ
Guitar-Amp : VST Plugin TC-Thirty

RME Mulitface, RME Quad Mic
TC Electronic Powercore DSP Platform


Best regards
Steve
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Remember this is my subjective, egoistic opinion:

1. Melody
8 Great american, Neil Young sounding tune. Classic.

2. Vocals
7+ Very good vocals, laidback and soft. The song could maby have become even better with some "Uhh- uhh- ahh-" choir stuff? And it sounds bad at the words:"tired excuses", "sit", "fireworks" "got" "not". Maybe you should sing "sit" instead of "si-i-it" and "got" instead of "go-oh-oht" and so on?

3. Instrumentation
6+ Fits the music, but lacks a little bit of dynamic and sometimes there are some strange gaps between chord changes. The slide guitar seems to be stuck on one note at the end. Otherwise nice guitar chords there.

4. Lyrics
7 Some good points, but also some strange choices of words. Could be I don't understand it thoght. Why are there fireworks? Chorus 2 is great.

What's that smell, yes it's a fart
Many words that rhymes with heart


5. Quality of mix
7- Sounds good. But the mix leaves some holes, I think it's because every instrument stops at the same time. Like after " smart". Maybe you should make a new take for the acoustic guitar and play the hole song, and keep a steady rhythm, not stopping at the gaps between lines.

6. Overall impression
7

All in all a very nice Neil Young/ Tom Petty song. The mix and instrumentation could be a lot tighter, but the rest it's good. This song sticks to my brain, ... season of my heart...
 
I just want to let you know dude that my songs are finished musically, yet there is no lyrical part. I just think that it would have been fair to review mine. I spent many months working parts of the music out...
 
thank you Roomx

specially your sentence:

"But the mix leaves some holes, I think it's because every instrument stops at the same time."

This I think might be also the reason for my first record "cant tell me nothin", where I think the rhythm is not fluently.
( www.stephan-musik.de/Cant_tell_me_nothin(Steve).mp3 )

I think I will put a second acoustic guitar and keep faster strokes. That might fill the gaps, or ?

Steve
 
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