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    Talking First Finished Original Track!

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    Well, I've spent the last couple of years making tracks lasting about 30 secs. They started as the basis of a new song, but then I never finished them - just moved on to the next one ! Finally, as part of my new years resolutions, I've actually stuck to a track, done the vocals, and finished it! Woohoo!!

    So, it's called "Your Eyes" - don't really know what style you'd call it. Melodic, laid-back soft rock? Hmmm....doesn't sound such a good genre to be in! Anyway, I don't seem to have a set style anyway. Tracks just turn out how they do - sometimes more ambient, sometimes more rocky. Here it is:

    http://www.alexclark.force9.co.uk/mp3/Your%20Eyes.mp3

    I'd love to hear what people think - of the track, the mix etc.. Constructive criticism is what I'm after, but be kind! I've done very basic mastering to it. Drums needs a bit of "humanizing" and I'm not too keen on the guitar outro bits but apart from that, it's mostly done! The beginning guitar riff could do with being re-recorded as it's not very tight.

    Equipment used:

    AMD Athlon XP 1600
    256 MB RAM
    Audiophile 2496
    Audiobuddy Pre
    AT 4033 mic
    POD
    Yamaha RGZ Custom Guitar
    Tangelwood Rebel 4K Bass
    Sonar (+ included fx plugs)
    Sonic Synth (drums, pad and chorus guitar)

    Thanks!

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    Listening now...sounds terrific! I'm listening through small, crappy computer speakers at work, so I'm not sure I can offer any mix suggestions. My only one would be that the lead vocal could come up just a bit.

    I like the song itself...reminds me a bit of Squeeze, Paul Young....

    Only suggestion would be to add some sort of a variation in the middle, rather than repeating the same chords (although you vary it nicely with the arrangement).

    Congratulations on your first tune....a fine effort!

    BobOC
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    Sounds excellent to me.The drums do need a little "human" touch like you mentioned but it still works fine just like it is.Very nice work on the vocals.Cool distorted guitar at 2:36......yeah this is a good one man.The recording is solid.

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    Great sounding recording. Good clarity and separation for everything.

    I really like the vocal sound, particularly the octave doubling (my favourite vocal effect).

    Bring the lead vocal up a wee bit.

    Nice laid-back song, maybe needs a bit more light and shade in the arrangement. But a good, catchy melody too.

    The sound quality is very good, especially for a first attempt.

    Very good work.

    Cheers

    AB

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    Thanks for the feedback guys. Much appreciated.

    It's really inspired me and given me confidence in what I'm doing - I've already started working on a new tune!

    I might re-visit this one at some point, to try to create a bit more variation in it.

    Thanks again!

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    Very nice sounding pop song man. Sounds really good. Voice does need to come up a tad.

    Excellent for a first attempt.

    Welcome
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    Sounds good

    Does remind me of a Paul Young type song styling. I like the synth sounds - do you like the Sonic Synth? I was looking into adding that to my arsenal. I like your vocals as well - could maybe raise the level a small amount, but have a nice smooth feel to them.

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    Nice song and a nice recording. Good instrument selection. The distorted guitar at 2:36 was a nice addition, and the whole tone of it was perfect. Good vocals. I liked the keyboard part(s).

    I'd recommend compressing and bringing up the bass. The mix seemed to lack a low end just a bit.

    The vocals were a bit soft, I'd move them up just a bit.

    Good job.

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    Vocals up, drum down. Nice backing vocals. Very nice job overall.

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