I don't know the original but your delivery reminds me of Grace Jones for some reason. I like your guitar sounds. Keys and bass fit well. It's almost like something Television would have done. Hell all those 80s bands sound the same
If only I could be Grace Jones. But that would take some work. She's everything I'm not: black, Jamaican, a former supermodel, a record producer, a woman, and a singer.
I could probably transition to the woman part, but I'd have to talk to my wife first.
I think there was an archetypal 80's sound and those songs did all sound alike. They share a lot in common with today's pop music which is highly overproduced and, to my ear, all sounds the same. The music was slightly more dynamic, though, with a lot less compression. There was also a tendency to over-reverb sounds, but the real 80's sound that no one ever mentions is chorus.
This particular song, however, is in another class IMHO. It's very clean, very sparse, with dynamic range. Even after the vinyl to YouTube transition. Of course, I'm a sucker for basic. If you can't do it in less than ten tracks (or fewer), what's the point. The rest is just engineering muscle and technology.
I like the comparison to Television, although my first thought was Pylon--mostly because of the female vocals.