I downloaded the wrong one, the slightly shorter one, first. This one's way better than that one. A lovely piece of music. Lady and the Unicorn stuff.
The violin is the sound I like best on this one, because it has the least reverb on it, I think. The effected guitar's so effected and ethereal that it's kind of indistinct. How bout trying a mix that's a lot drier than this one, just to see what it sounds like and see what people say? You don't have to go with a drier sound, but just to compare.
As for spoken bits, you have to be *really* careful with them, or they sound so hokey. You need very good words, and you have to sort of 'declaim' when you do a spoken bit, if you know what I mean. There are some contemporary American poets who know how to read their own stuff well, I think. Ever heard Coleman Barks?
Anyway, this is a really beautiful piece of music, and deserves a good sound. Hope you tweak it till it glitters.