I´m hearing in a pair of Sony´s
MDR-7509 and have no problems...
MIXING
Take some low end of reverb in synth pads.
Tame the hi-hat, give some around 10khz to it and remove some around 8khz
Good bass sound there when it´s not fighting with other instruments.
I Think everythong sounds nicely, but overall volume hides it because of loud Synth. Lower it´s volume and bring the rest up front.
I think the KICK SNARE KICK SNARE KICK SNARE with hats in contra-tempo don´t work at all...
There´s some weird noise at 8khz I guess.
Why not maximizing it´s volume? at -3!
SONGWRITING
Well... it´s noticeable that someone can´t play a keyboard for the lines and for the lost tempi
Maybe a change in the lyrics that just repeat themselves?
It seems to me that you don´t know where to go untill you get to 01:00
00:43 Weakens it´s other appereances
Why´s that HEY HEY HEY HEY HEY? Do you really imagine peopple in a club screaming HEY HEY HEY HEY
Didn´t have enough time to listen to hole song but it seems to be in it´s way UP!
Well if you guys could just comment my mix!
http://www.homerecording.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=186600