All Alone

[jonlint]

Hi all,

Had some writing block and a busy life so hadn't written anything new for a while. That came to an end today - wrote and recorded this song "All Alone" today. Inspiration is the tragic relationship between Demri and Layne. Feedback most welcome:

All Alone by Jonathan Linton 4 | Free Listening on SoundCloud

ALL ALONE
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

You promised me paradise
Showered me
With sugar and spice
Now you’re gone
There’s a hole in me
‘Till death we’ll part
Then I’m free

Can’t you see
You’re a part of me
Every step I make
You walk with me
Your spirit lives
Inside my bones
Why did you leave me here
All alone

Ay!
All alone
All alone

If only
We could turn back time
Take a dif’rent road
To sublime
Your curse on me
Will ever be
‘Till death we’ll part
Then I’m free

Can’t you see
You’re a part of me
Every step I make
You walk with me
Your spirit lives
Inside my bones
Why did you leave me here
All alone

Ay!
All alone
All alone

SOLO

Can’t you see
You’re a part of me
Every step I make
You walk with me
Your spirit lives
Inside my bones
Why did you leave me here
All alone

Ay!
All alone
All alone…

 

[jonlint]

Hi there,

Did a remix and changed the ending - also changed the bass tone and added some different bass parts to make it more interesting:

All Alone V2 by Jonathan Linton 4 | Free Listening on SoundCloud

 

[La9]

Hello!
Cool song. If I should comment on the mix and production my opinion is that you are a bit over the top with the effects on the snare and vocals.
Maybe back it off a bit (a lot) in the verses and save it for the chorus?

Edit: Forgot to mention that it is very well performed as usual.

 

[Deleted member 203901]

It's a nice song with a good vibe. As mentioned above, I also felt like the effects on the different elements could be reduced a little. But that's just my personal taste/opinion though. Overall, I enjoyed listening to this track.