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[killthepixelnow]

Hello guys, some time ago I posted some of my "mastered" tracks here and you gave me some tips to improve it. This is a small excerpt of what I have right now. When I A/B my final file against a commercial tune from the same genre I can notice that mine is quieter. At the same time, I also acknowledge that this is a difficult thing to achieve with my humble acknowledges and gear. Anyway, does anybody here have any thoughts/comments on this excerpt?



Thanks in advance!

PS: I can upload the original [.aiff] file if you want.

 

[Seafroggys]

Aside from some playing issues, it sounds a tad muddy to me. I don't listen to this genre often, but from what I recall songs tend to have a bit more clarity. Maybe adding some high-mids will both increase clarity and make it appear louder?

 

[Massive Master]

I have a hard time trusting anything with SoundCloud... A 320kbps Fraunhoffer or LAME MP3 would be spectacularly better to make judgements with. That said, absolutely -- There's something either really weird or just plain really not there in the upper mids & top end.

Not that most of this genre (IMO/E) doesn't usually have far too much in the upper mids & top (which is actually what most of my DM/HC clients comment on). But in this case (and again, it could just be SoundCloud's issue), there's a bit of a deficit going on.

 

[killthepixelnow]

I converted the original [.aiff] to a 320kbps [.mp3] file. You can find the audio attached. I agree with Seafroggys about the clarity, in some way I find the result a bit "dark," not the "bright" sound I'm looking for.

Do you reckon is there something weird on the mix?

 

[Jameson81]

isolate and seperate and compress

 

[maxwelldub]

sounds good to me

 

[simon22]

very good.