Weird Al covers Rod Piazza

[drstawl]

I originally posted the lyrical brainstorm in the songwriting clinic.

It was finished and dedicated to the H/R Jamfest. They got the CD. So I'll post the .mp3 and the final lyrics.

http://users.adelphia.net/~drstawl/wkwgo192.mp3 (~6.79MB)

The lyrics sheet:

She's got crazy long legs
way up to the sky
The world and his uncle
want a piece of that pie
Got a Sweet Disposition
that's burned into ROM
You tell me:
who knows what's goin' on?

She's got gooey bud
That stinks up my Van
And windowpane
When my brain needs a tan
I never have to ask
What kind of shit is she on?
So You tell me:
Who knows what's goin' on?

When She shines up my Harley
It's an orgy of chrome
She's always up
For a crystal Bone
She got a first class ticket
that's etched in stone
She Pays my taxes
and Signs for my Loans
She takes out the garbage
And she mows the lawn.
So you tell me:
Who knows what's goin' on?

She loves my Silver Cloud
And My Learjet on Loan
My Olympic Jacuzzi
Carved in Italian Stone
She breaks the bank
Like a Chicken Bone
But You Tell Me:
Who knows what's goin' on?

She dresses in camo
Comes Equipped with Small Arms
Her Hand Grenades
Are only some of her charms
Salvador Dali
Tattooed her arm
So You tell me:
Who knows what's goin' on?

When I order shrimp
she don't bring me no prawns
She shreds on guitar
Just like Stevie Ray Vaughn!
Got a 100 foot dock
Where she parks her Dinghy
And an army on call
Just to polish that thingie
Now Pass me that bottle
of Grey Poupon;
Then You tell me:
Who knows what's Goin' On?

[groucho]

Well, I've been a Piazza fan for years so I had to check this out.

I dunno, I could do without that vocal effect, definitely. I could do without the synth sounds too, but then I guess it's hard not to compare it to the original, which is a blues tune, and this is kinda... casio-sounding.

I could envision a less-overtly "bluesy" take on this tune (which is, I'm guessing, what you're going for), and it sounds like your singing is cool under that effect, but this doesn't quite make it for me.

Just a different keyboard sound and a different vocal sound might make all the difference though.

Chris

[drstawl]

Thanks, groucho for your critique.

Yeah- casio is the way it sounded to me as well.

[drstawl]

C'mon!

I wanted to hear some criticism!

Only Groucho ponied up!

I won't apologize for the drums and bass.

They were a scratch track for a live replacement.


And did DW ever record this at the Fest?

[dobro]

I like the tune, the arrangement and your delivery. I can hear Mose Allison doing this one. I'd like it better with less effect on the vocal I think. You're singing more and better on this one than I've ever heard you sing before - nice work.

Here's something to try and see what it sounds like: on the outro, there are two keyboard parts. Fade out during the first part, the one that sounds like vibes, and end it at 4.20. I think it might give the song more balance and drive.

Yeah, the keys sound cheesy, but I like it that way - it suits the tune and the grin in it.

Good stuff - rather different in a way from your usual, wouldn't you say, old boy?

[Pedullist]

I'm with Dobro (o, what a surprise... )