Aight jugalo, etc.

[Abyyss]

Aight - I decided I may as well post what I might use as my verse so far. I'm still not sure about it, it may be a bit too long but I'm not worried about that at the moment. The beat's different to what I usually spit on, that's why I really need 2nd opinions.

Aight - should I spit wit them as they are, revise them or scrap 'em and start again?

Spit It - Abyyss' Verse

I'm so hungry that I'm starvin' myself,
Malnutrition sufferer, maybe I should get some help,
There ain't no quick fix for this, it's sickenin',
Seeing fakes get rich for nothin', claimin' they on'a' summin',
When it's my record they should be bumpin',
I need ta' eat this mic while it's ripe,
Before I fall flat on my face an' become wack overnight,
Feel this beat's vibe, grab the mic an' ignore it's hype,
Floss told me to rip it,
Like tracin' paper see through it an' kill it,
I'm tha illest,
At least I will be after the fever I get,
Droolin', I need to be prepared and set,
This cup's full to the brim, it just needs a tap,
So that everything spills out - why bother holding back?
Phase 2 - write until my wrist gets twisted, or my mind is lifted,
Next writer's block, I'ma have to stop,
Till I can work out how to make the next beat rock,
I need to knock down this wall, it's the only thing standin' in my way,
Big ups to Stray, Floss, Jugalo, Nick an' the rest,
You know who you are an' you know you're the best,
You got tha skills, don't hold back,
We'll make it together -
Just grab the microphone an' spit it!


I think it loses a bit towards the end, maybe?
Not sure. What y'all think?

BTW, I am perfectly healthy - it's all imagery of my "Hunger to spit", don't start callin' doctors for me!!

[chalin27]

Definitely nice words. I just wonder what the delivery is going to be like. If the delivery matches the your content I'm sure you got a winner on your hands.

[Abyyss]

Thanks.

As for vocals they match it I'd say, pretty good. I'll just have to choose which flow ta' use (got about 5 so as to keep versatile), I'll probably use my standard type which is kinda like em meets 2pac mixed in wit B.I.G. seasoned off wit originality.

(I'm always nervous when I post lyrics - guess I'm scared of what people might say)

[Abyyss]

This verse is for the collabo BTW

[flossyboy]

damn, that's butter on the biscuit
wait till the Whole HR board hear us flip it
haters please don't steal it
cause i got some steel that'll steal ya spirit
do ya get it

hahahaha some ish off the top

but for realz
them lyrics butter

Hey i love the way the intro comes in on this beat
email me them keys you played i'ma use some sounds
with a better tone, and work in some change ups for the
verses

GOOD JOB MAYNE
HEY I"M HITTIN THE U.K. June 20th, i'm takin my ride with me too
so hit me up so we can link up in person and really lay it down.


That Texas Fella
sugaty@aol.com

[SPINSTERWUN]

Great job! Abyss.

[Abyyss]

Originally posted by flossyboy
Hey i love the way the intro comes in on this beat
email me them keys you played i'ma use some sounds
with a better tone, and work in some change ups for the
verses

Got my e-mail about what a "great" producer I am, I see

Damn sounds! The only thing holdin' my producin' back!

Thanks y'all fa' showin' me love.

[jugalo180]

i must tip my hat to you. your words have conviction, i like that.

[Flo' Dolo]

Spin?!?

[jugalo180]

you have us anticipating the final product, i agree with everyone else i think you should spit it as is.

[Abyyss]

Originally posted by Flo' Dolo
Spin?!?

?

Originally posted by Jugalo180
you have us anticipating the final product, i agree with everyone else i think you should spit it as is.

Anticipatin', eh?

Sounds like I'm really gonna have ta' come at this one.

Flossy's gettin' tha beat finished off soon so I can start practicin' properly. I'll jus' do what I can.

[Abyyss]

**cough*bump*cough**

[Kevlar]

I can feel that shit....i wouldn't have posted it with all the dick riders out there but i guess it's too hot for a biter to touch.
I like to see cat's like you who put time in this shit because in my lyrics i try to make people feel them but sometimes i get too complex and the only one who understands the shit is me.
But for real hit me off when that shit get's finished ....that will mos def be a special delivery, peace.

Peace Love Respect,


Ya Boy Kevlar


(just don't ghost write for new no limit...please let them sink
lol lol )

[Abyyss]

Far as I'm concerned they can steal it all they want - the evidence is here, with date an' everything and it's unlikely I'll be makin' money out of it anyway so let tha baby have is bottle if all they can do is bite an' if they start makin' serious money outta it then I'll jus have ta' become successful quick an' sue 'em. I mean, the date's on tha post so they can't really argue. Besides, if anyone were ta' steal 'em they wouldn't be able ta' use 'em 'coz every1 would be able 2 tell they're mine. 'Preciate ur concern, I worry 'bout tha too but seen as I'm not makin' anything out of it anyway I can't really lose if someone decides to be a dick. It's too hot for them to spit anyway 'coz those who can spit it will be gud enough 2 write their own lyrics.

(bit long winded ^)

Thanks for tha support an' don't worry, I'll never ghost-write

When I'm writin' lyrics I try ta' think of the mood/concept of the track first then I try to get inta' that mood/idea (a bit of empathy required, takes sum longer than others but it is pos.) then (most of the time) I listen to tha beat for tha divine inspiration an try to think of 3/4 cool lines, then I just play around - tryin'a put more complex ideas in here an' there. Some times they can be done quite quicly an it just spills out an some times it needs work, but tha most important bit is gettin' inta' tha frame of mind. Some times I write 'em without the beat an' I just move ma' body ta' sum sorta rhythm an write 2 that, problem is that they don' always goes wit other peoples beat then, I was lucky this time 'coz these lyrics go with tha beat for "Spit It", my flow prob. ain't up to tha standard I'd like it ta' be but it ain't that bad. Revisin' ur lyrics is important too, clever words are good, but u don't wanna hide tha meaning so much that peops can't get it/understand it. U'll find ur lyric-writing improves wit time, hell if ya' want I might post the earliest lyrics I have track of just ta' prove it (nah, too embarassing ) It's important that ur lyrics are actually talkin' about something not just wafflin' on 'bout nuthin', that's the prob. wit most comercial cats these days. An' u don;t try ta' make 'em feel them just work on makin' 'em as gud an' then ask cats if they feel 'em (hence this thread) I didn't know people would go crazy of this ish, I just wrote it, now I'm hit wit how tight it is an' how they can't get enough of it! I can do betta than this as well, 'coz it's always betta if ya write to tha beat which I couldn't do here 'coz flossy wuz still workin' on it I was just lucky they went. Hey, if u need help wit ur lyrics then just hit me up anytime an' I'll try ta' help u out a bit.

Sorry 4 tha long post everyone.

[Abyyss]

**bump-bump**

[muzakal]

abyss - nothin' but luv for ya baby.

Okay, help me wit deez bombs:

twiddly rit -
I'm flingin' tha spit
Ya catchin' me - poppin' out my rhymes for a dime

My Rolex be busted
My drop top's all rusted
WAIT! I'm not a rapper - nevermind.

Word.

What do you think? Skillz?

Be honest, now.

Ha ha. I'm just kiddin'.

Like what you're doing, keep it up and remember to work "smarter".

-muzakal

[Abyyss]

Originally posted by muzakal
abyss - nothin' but luv for ya baby.

Okay, help me wit deez bombs:

twiddly rit -
I'm flingin' tha spit
Ya catchin' me - poppin' out my rhymes for a dime

My Rolex be busted
My drop top's all rusted
WAIT! I'm not a rapper - nevermind.

Word.

What do you think? Skillz?

Be honest, now.

Ha ha. I'm just kiddin'.

I won't say anything.

Originally posted by muzakal
Like what you're doing, keep it up and remember to work "smarter".

What d'u mean, "smarter"?