Here I go again..

[IceFairy]

And I need help! I'm working on this song right now and the lyrics just AREN'T cutting it. Let me lay 'em out then I'll explain.

(Verse 1)
Between the spaces in your room
The light breaks through
And it shines on you
Before I let you go

Between the spaces in our lives
There's a basic soul
That's reflecting my hope
If you could let it go

(Chorus)
So why do I have to feel all of this pain?
When you're already gonna have to start
Everything over again
But how can you finish what you wouldn't begin?
And you know I've got all the time
If you would say you'll change your mind, my love

(Verse 2) - 2 choices here
a. Between your footsteps in the hall
I count them slow, and I find myself
Wishing I was following

Between the fire in your eyes
There's a purity that's
Reflecting on me
And I feel beautiful

b. Between your footsteps in the hall
I count them slow
And I want to know
If you know where they're going to

Between the fire in your lies
There's a purity
That's still reaching for me
If you would open up

(Chorus)
So why do I have to feel all of this pain?
When you're already gonna have to start
Everything over again
But how can you finish what you wouldn't begin?
And you know I've got all the time
If you would say you'll change your mind, my love
© 2002 Naomi Simpson

okay.. basically the first verse is okay, somewhat cheesy, the chorus is okay.. but the second verse is coming apart at the seams! Help!