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Help, help (a horrible Heffalump)!

I've written a text which I'm not happy with a line in it. It goes like this:

So we got swept into your swirl
you are a special type of girl <- Glaaah.
how come you can make us
walk the other way
live another day
when you laugh
what more will you steal

And the second line just makes me *puke*, but I can't figure out anything better. Come on people, I need ideas. I like the word swirl, but if you can come up with any replacements for the first line with similar meaning it's OK too.

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Swirling

"Swirl"...what a great word. Umm..."Twirl" and "Whirl" come to mind (if you want to stay with the theme), or I guess you could change the second line to something like, "So now we're living in YOUR world"...but It's kinda' hard to do this without a little more context.

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*whips out the guitar*

Twirl and whirl feels like the same word as swirl, so I can't use that, but
"you brought us to your twisted world" could work. I'll sleep on it. Thanks!
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Here are some words that go with swirl.

awhirl, burl, churl, cowgirl, curl, earl, furl, girl, hurl, impearl, knurl, newsgirl, pearl, playgirl, purl, salesgirl, schoolgirl, squirrel, swirl, twirl, uncurl, unfurl, whirl

I found them here.

http://www.rhymer.com/

I use this, and a freeware rhymer from analogx.com
and also a rhyming book I got from barnes and nobles. They all have something the others don't. Their tools, like a dictionary.
They help me, and most prowriters use them to.

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