How can i improve this mix?

[ColdAsh]

I wont repost what ive already posted so heres the link:
http://homerecording.com/bbs/showthr...861#post393861
Dont think im double posting or what ever its called because its same stuff and background, different question.
What CAN i do to make this sound better as far as mixing goes?

Feel free to reply to the other post but this is not some cheap tactic to get mre replies. BTW i eamiled Fed and appoligzed for bumping. I didnt know it was a big no no. Infact i didnt even know it had a name
Also this isnt a gimmik to get more download of my song because i wont gain a thing if more people do download it, just good advice.