New guitar beat plus a freestyle type track!

[Atillah]

beat from 09

Guitar Practice
lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=7523143&q=lo
hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=7523143&q=hi

freestyle from 08

Verbal Abuse
lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=7523180&q=lo
hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=7523180&q=hi



All feedback welcome. The guitar thing is relly just me learning. This was like my 5th time playing the guitar...EVER!

Thanks in advance for all comments and feedback, no peeping tom ish please!

lol

P.S.

Please pardon how I didn't use a compressor or de-esser on the freestyle track. Might get hissy if you play it on studio monitors so start it with the volume low. If you dudes are anything like me you need your ears like Somalian pirates need speedboats!

lol

[Atillah]

Oh yeah...I tagged the beat...I know it pisses most people off, but hey....that's what I do (tag...not piss you off on purpose )

[Atillah]

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[-=ThE_SkRillA=-]

Calm down guy.

[Atillah]

Originally Posted by -=the_skrilla=-

calm down guy.

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[Atillah]

Give me feedback bitches....damn....lol

[RnRRecording]

OK, well I'll give you some feedback
First of all, the guitar track is not working (gives me some 'song does not exist' thing).
I really like the freestyle track, a couple of bits of contructive criticism.

1) If you're serious about recording - buy a better mic because the sound quality of your voice isn't great
2) Work on your rap delivery - it's sounds a bit like a monologue, but other than that it's really good, flows well and I like the lyrics
3) As for the beat, the intro was too long I think, and didnt really translate to the song - I think it was taken off another song (am I right?) if so, just knock it out and put another intro in with the synth.
4) You might wanna kick the beat out at point when you're freestyling, to empathise some of your lyrics

Keep it up, well done

[Atillah]

thanks

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