On My Side verse (feedback homiezzz)

[Physical Ill]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12773106898ffe9c/

I put this here & in the thread cuz I don't think anyone saw it there...

[gullyjewelz]

re-uppin this - come on folk, lets get some feedback on this joint . . .

[Trumpspade]

Originally Posted by Physical Ill

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12773106898ffe9c/

I put this here & in the thread cuz I don't think anyone saw it there...

U need to add more energy to your tone.

Practice your verse about 50 more times until you are comfortable with the lyrics. It still sounds like you're reading, flow wise, it needs to sit within the parameters of the beat more comfortably!

Just my opinion!

[Re-Lapse]

I'll have to agree with Trump. You're just like me, it sounds like you're reading. Although I'd have to admit you sound more legitimate than I do. Maybe I just aint made for the rap game. I'll still crank out some beats tho!

--Re

[Physical Ill]

Alright here's another take on it...

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12911062486e00cb/

[Physical Ill]

I guess that's still a no? Maybe next time I guess...

[Trumpspade]

Originally Posted by Physical Ill

I guess that's still a no? Maybe next time I guess...

Nah, it's better than the first one! IMHO

Keep at it.........You've come a looong way, trust me!

[gullyjewelz]

i will check it later tonight when i get off work - but 1 thing that was comin to me the last time is whether u r doin the whole verse in 1 take ?? u can chop up some of the sections in to dif. takes to get a better "finshed" verse . . . n PLENTY of bigtime cats do it - so its not a "ego" or "skill" thing . .. its a solid recording technique!

[Trumpspade]

Originally Posted by gullyjewelz

i will check it later tonight when i get off work - but 1 thing that was comin to me the last time is whether u r doin the whole verse in 1 take ?? u can chop up some of the sections in to dif. takes to get a better "finshed" verse . . . n PLENTY of bigtime cats do it - so its not a "ego" or "skill" thing . .. its a solid recording technique!

Good word of advice Gully. That is so true and alot of street cats don't realize that all the Bigheads "HAVE" to do it. It has "Nothing" to do wit ability, it's mandatory to make it work!
Plus it will increase you flow 200%

[gullyjewelz]

P.I. - u did any more work to the verse?

[Physical Ill]

Naw, I haven't been cuz of a combination of school (over now), slackin off, and cuz I just got a new PC but I can't get the sound to work.

[gullyjewelz]

ahite - well let me know if u git somethin crackin wit it