Home Recording

Go Back   Home Recording > General Discussions > Songwriting, Singing & Vocals


        

                                
                                10/30 - [video] Demo Roland TD-20SX
Reply    Audiofanzine Homestudio Homestudio News Homestudio Medias Homestudio Tests Homestudio Articles Homestudio User Reviews Homestudio Classifieds Ads
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1  
Old 04-10-2008
ido1957's Avatar
ido1957 ido1957 is offline
4K Silver Member
 
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Alberta, Canada
Posts: 4,460
Rep Power: 4264069
ido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond repute
Back In My Arms

Back In My Arms ©Gerry Steele

(Verse 1)
When it’s late at night and I close my eyes
I see a faded picture of you
And I wonder if tonight you might be
Thinking bout me too

Am I ever in your dreams
Do you ever yearn for me
Am I a long forgotten love
Or just a faded memory

(Chorus)
And if a miracle
Could bring you back to me
Our love will last this time I know
Make my dreams the memories we shared
Before I let you go

I want you back in my arms,
To hold you close to me
Baby I just can’t go on
Fill the emptiness within my heart
It’s been there since you’ve been gone

(Break - intro)

(Verse 2)
Just my desperate heart or maybe, all in my mind
I hear a distant whisper of you
The silence barely broken, yet it’s strong enough
To bring back all the pain of losing you

I won’t stop believing
And no matter what it takes
Keep on looking ‘til I find you
This is what I want to say

(Chorus)
And if a miracle
Could bring you back to me
Our love will last this time I know
Make my dreams the memories we shared
Before I let you go

I want you back in my arms,
To hold you close to me
Baby I just can’t go on
Fill the emptiness within my heart
It’s been there since you’ve been gone

****************************************************
Still haven't worked up the music on this yet. It's always subject to change when that gets going...
__________________
G M P
H S B
Reply With Quote
  #2  
Old 04-12-2008
rayc's Avatar
rayc rayc is offline
L'ancien escargot
 
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Box kites, Bald Hills & daytripper cafe's.
Posts: 5,591
Rep Power: 2723331
rayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond reputerayc has a reputation beyond repute
You do this stuff SSSSSOOOOOOO well Gerry!
I can't wait to hear it.
__________________
Cheers
rayC
soundclick, unearthed, mspace & utub
Reply With Quote
  #3  
Old 04-12-2008
clevodrummer clevodrummer is offline
Tascammer
 
Join Date: Mar 2006
Location: Third Stone from the Sun
Age: 52
Posts: 219
Rep Power: 6587
clevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond reputeclevodrummer has a reputation beyond repute
your lyrics

good song...
Reply With Quote
  #4  
Old 04-12-2008
up-fiddler's Avatar
up-fiddler up-fiddler is offline
Taming the World--for now
 
Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Beautiful Lake Superior (Near, not in.)
Age: 59
Posts: 1,253
Rep Power: 736882
up-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond repute
Nice effort

++++++++10s OK....Now get to work recording this so I can hear what you do with it. Really, I can't wait. Good tune.
__________________
Studio
Dave's Blog
Reply With Quote
  #5  
Old 04-12-2008
Nicole_Rose's Avatar
Nicole_Rose Nicole_Rose is offline
Great White North Girl
 
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: in my own little world.
Posts: 2,399
Rep Power: 1665308
Nicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond reputeNicole_Rose has a reputation beyond repute
good lyrics Ido, i can't wait to hear it
__________________
If ignorance was water the world would drown.
Reply With Quote
  #6  
Old 04-14-2008
gecko zzed's Avatar
gecko zzed gecko zzed is offline
audio illusion
 
Join Date: Oct 2005
Location: Ranelagh Tasmania
Age: 58
Posts: 1,849
Rep Power: 2052861
gecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond reputegecko zzed has a reputation beyond repute
Quote:
Originally Posted by ido1957 View Post
When it’s late at night and I close my eyes
I see a faded picture of you
And I wonder if tonight you might be
Thinking bout me too
I have a big internal dilemma when I read lyrics such as these.

On the one hand I appreciate the care taken with them, the story they tell, and how they would sit nicely within the right musical framework. So there is no small measure of musical ability behind this.

But on the other hand, I am a crabby old cynic who craves novelty and I always think to myself, "Is there a way of saying roughly the same thing without using words and phrases that others have used?"

So I set myself a little exercise. How could I say "late at night" differently? How could I say "close my eyes" differently.

And I came up with a slightly modified first verse:

"When the moon strikes twelve on shuttered eyes
I see your dusty photograph
And wonder if those eyes return
The thoughts I hold of you"

It's a bit awkward, and I missed out on the rhyme. Clearly more work is needed. But that's the point . . . standard phrases are a lot easier to work with (which is why they are standards), but, in satisfying my selfish yearning for originality, I hope I can spur writers to go further, to look beyond the normal for their source of images.
Reply With Quote
  #7  
Old 04-14-2008
ido1957's Avatar
ido1957 ido1957 is offline
4K Silver Member
 
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Alberta, Canada
Posts: 4,460
Rep Power: 4264069
ido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond reputeido1957 has a reputation beyond repute
rayc, clevodrummer, up-fiddler, Nicole_Rose, gecko zzed
Thanks for taking the time to read these lines and for posting some great feedback. I'll be working on putting some music to the words as time permits. I'll post once I get a rough draft completed.

__________________
G M P
H S B
Reply With Quote
  #8  
Old 04-15-2008
up-fiddler's Avatar
up-fiddler up-fiddler is offline
Taming the World--for now
 
Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Beautiful Lake Superior (Near, not in.)
Age: 59
Posts: 1,253
Rep Power: 736882
up-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond reputeup-fiddler has a reputation beyond repute
Quote:
Originally Posted by gecko zzed View Post
......But that's the point . . . standard phrases are a lot easier to work with (which is why they are standards), but, in satisfying my selfish yearning for originality, I hope I can spur writers to go further, to look beyond the normal for their source of images.
Thanks and reps for a great reminder.
__________________
Studio
Dave's Blog
Reply With Quote
  #9  
Old 04-15-2008
LI_Slim's Avatar
LI_Slim LI_Slim is offline
voice in the wilderness
 
Join Date: Jul 2000
Location: New York
Posts: 1,112
Rep Power: 522816
LI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond reputeLI_Slim has a reputation beyond repute
I agree that it's a professional job, but also that it's nothing new; almost phoned in...
__________________
Slim's Site
Reply With Quote
Reply



Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump
Google
 

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
I'm back with Quad 5 Trio once again shackrock MP3 Mixing Clinic 2 03-30-2005 17:25
VF users - how do you back up your data? jfrog Fostex Forum 3 02-17-2005 20:48
Looking Forward, Moving Back [Lyrics] esull1985 Songwriting, Singing & Vocals 4 06-21-2004 21:42
Lets try some thing ! Henri Devill Songwriting, Singing & Vocals 102 07-17-2002 15:53
compressing back vocals crosstudio Mixing / Mastering 4 09-28-2001 05:46


All times are GMT -7. The time now is 01:46.


Powered by: vBulletin
Copyright ©2000 - 2009, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright © 1995-2008 Audiofanzine except where noted. All Rights Reserved.