What do you think of these lyrics to "The Gods of Heavy Metal"?

[KaveKong]

This is a tribute to Black Sabbath. I wrote the words and music, and enjoy the song.

My wife says the spoken part is too long (so long I won't write it all here), so I have to come up with a third verse. Here is the first two verses and the chorus:



Once upon a time there was a band...
loud and proud and always out of hand.
They came from Birmingham, and conquered all the land and every soul.

Tony, was wailin' on guitar.
Ozzy, was singin' near the bar.
Geezer played the bass,
and Ward, he set the pace of rock and roll

(Chorus) These are the gooooooods, of heavy metal (metal, metal, metal...)
Repeat.


Black Sabbath, the gods of rock and roll.
They set the stage and rocked at every show.
Then others came along, and played a mighty song of heavy metal (metal, metal, metal, metal).

Iron Maiden, Megadeth and Judas Priest.
Legends from the west and from the east.
Metallica, Dio, Motorhead and more, all legends each.

(Chorus).



That's all I have. I need a third verse. Any suggestions?

[Deadlove]

Don't take it the wrong way. I wouldn't make a third verse.
I'd prob try to forget about the first two vereses as well.

That sounds like some dumb shit MANOWAR would sing.

[Farview]

Originally Posted by Deadlove

That sounds like some dumb shit MANOWAR would sing.

Like this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WX5cwHNviug

[KaveKong]

That's a great video! That's exactly what I'm talking about. This isn't serious. It's fun and silly.

Heavy Metal, like the 80s, is dead, but sometimes looking at dead things is fun.

[Farview]

Heavy metal is dead???!!!! Believe it or not, that new Manowar album went gold in less than a week. (in Germany)