Would love some feedback on my songs

[Henry Duthler]

Looking for opinions on the ideas of these songs...I am not a vocalist by any stretch, but from a songwriting perspective it would be very nice to get some feedback...

Here is the link to a few of my songs...take a listen...and let me know what you think...

http://www.betarecords.com/openframe...gically.placed

or

http://www.unsigned.com/strategicallyplaced

[Todzilla]

You're right. You're not a singer. And yet, your style and delivery almost works in the first tune. I would work on refining it further. The whistles work well, nice verb on them, nice execution.

I want to hear something beyond the same riff ad nauseum. After a couple minutes, I want some variety. The breakdown near the end is good, but I'd transition to it much sooner.

Hope this helps.

-Todzilla

[Dumby]

+2 on the vocals...your vocals have little bit of that soprano theme song feel to them, but they need work and they way they fit in the mix is a little weird to me. But keep experimenting and practicing, maybe something will click and fall into place with that. Most importantly, how do YOU feel about your vocals?

I like the overall recording quality. The tunes are fun and your music is pretty good. Keep up the good work and post an update in here when your stuff is updated I'll give another listen if you don't think I'm an asshole .
Take care and keep up the good work!

[Henry Duthler]

That's why I posted it for all to hear...and judge...I want the criticism...because I am interested in learning and becoming better....

Again thanks and I will post updates once I get a chance to do some work on the songs...

[Henry Duthler]

Keep in mind the recording have me singing, and once I find a real vocalist...the vocals will be redone...you guys are great....thanks for providing me with some great feedback...It all helps...

[Todzilla]

Originally Posted by Henry Duthler

Keep in mind the recording have me singing, and once I find a real vocalist...the vocals will be redone...you guys are great....thanks for providing me with some great feedback...It all helps...

Dude, if you can get more control over your gravelly voice (think Tom Waits or the Sopranos theme song), you'll be fine. I'd just work on it line by line, sweating your delivery.

Careful not to find a vocalist who is on pitch and hopelessly boring.

[Henry Duthler]

Ironically, that's how I record all of my vocals...line by line...time after time...but you know what? I agree...I had a vocalist that I worked with before...and he was too perfect...and it really took away from the emotion of the tunes...So I decided to just do it my way and have fun with it...it's gotten much better already since I started...everything in time right?

[Henry Duthler]

Originally Posted by Todzilla

Careful not to find a vocalist who is on pitch and hopelessly boring.

Is this what you mean? lol this is a very early recording of one of my tunes and just curious what you think....

http://www.unsigned.com/strategicallyplaced - Anthem to the Estranged (First one)