1st Freestyle

[Tricker]

If niggas wanna stand in a column, they can wind up in a bind
Cause my punchlines blast back like (column)(bine)/

But when I'm spitting my lyrical attack fuck a trenchcoat and fuck a gat cause I grip a mic so tight that-

It strangles out these fake gangstas fake 50's fake ogs and the like cause male or female black or white/

A hos a ho facing the same destiny-on both knees in front of me/(haha)

But you know my steez on the street coat open like a 7-11 24-7
with a bag of (tricks)/

Moving these (mix)-(tapes) making wine like I'm crushing (grapes)/

Running the 9-1-Zero giving your earlobes a load to
carry similar to an 18wheeler/

What ya think?

[ido1957]

Well I'm not big on the n-word (anytime) or swear words in any tune so I'll pass on those. I'm also not big on putting down women as sex objects.

That's just my personal opinion - I know that a lot of today's rap contains these types of things but disco never did and look how much money that made the BeeGees

It's a good rap other than that.....nice style and good phrasing, with a built in beat that you can feel when reading it.

Do you have a recorded version yet - wouldn't mind hearing the delivery/beats on this.....

[rayc]

Yeah take away the misogyny, the racist slang, the swearing & the gangster hubris and what's left is...
Actually I'm struggling to find more than one real rhyme - tapes/grapes.
I know it's part of the genre - false rhymes, mispronounciations to make rhymes and not bothering to rhyme - but can't see why they are called rhymes when, patently, they aren't.
It might work with the right music behind it though.

[guitarist_44]

I for one, can't stand rap lyrics at all.