i need opinion on lyrics

[brandonleitch]

Chorus-gonna take me down
Throw me to the ground
I didn’t want you anyway


Make me feel different
I lost my heart, there it went
Away from me
So far away from me


gonna take me down
Throw me to the ground
I didn’t want you anyway

Crashing down like a plane without a pilot
Cause finally you get what you’re meant to get
Get away from me
So far away from me

Chorus

Take what you need,
cause I’m leaving soon
your hurtful soul and greed
they hurt me too

get away from me


-i wrote this song in a couple of minutes, theres a crazy beat to it that u would need to hear to understand the beat of some lines. When i record it, i'll post. But what do u think of the lyrics?

room for improvement of course

[random.hero]

sounds alright...
do post it when u record it

[ido1957]

I like them - seems to have a natural beat built into them - good meter.....makes for a good song.....

Yes - Post the tune once it's done. It's always cool to hear a song AFTER you've read the lyrics cause sometimes it goes in a completely different direction than you'd expect....

[up-fiddler]

Song path
Record->Post->Critical acclaim->Jump for joy

Good luck. We look forward to hearing from you.