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[jibran]

Please peep my new rhymes.

http://whosnextonline.com/Artist.aspx?ID=4941

Again, A Drive By on Main Street is not gangsta rap-the entire track is subliminal.

Thanks,

The Deen

[ethos]

im a little busy now, but ill check it out later.

[Fieva]

I see some improvement, but the main thing you need to study up on is riding the beat. You might want to use a metronome to make sure your rhymes are on point with the tempo of the beat. The lyrics are nice, but the delivery sounds like you're trying to sell me a vacuum at my front door. No offense, but I think riding the beat is one of your weak points that needs to be more focused on. Do that and I can see a nice flip on your music.

Fie.

[ethos]

I agree, you dont ride the beat.
you have to be hard on yourself and cut stuff out so it fits on beat.
I think your trying to say too much.
too many syllables throws you off rhthym.
there is improvement though.
keep with it, you have a crazy amount of potential.
how long have you been rhyming?

[Fieva]

I know that most of the stuff that makes it onto a beat is highly edited because I talk too much in bars. Luckily, most of it is profanity LOL.

What are you using to record your tracks in? I know that Cubase has a metronome built in so that you can practice riding the beat and see what goes good where before you actually record it.

It's good to see a younger cat who's got real potential and just needs to be brushed up properly.

Fie.

[ethos]

just use the snares as the metronome.
follow the snares and youul be on beat.

[jibran]

Got it; will do.

And btw, I've been rhyming (verbally) for two weeks; I think someone asked.

[jugalo180]

Originally Posted by ethos

just use the snares as the metronome.
follow the snares and youul be on beat.

i co-sign that