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Trying to write a decent song (lyrically)...

OK. This is what I have so far. Please tell me if it is any good or what I should change. Should I just scrap it all together?

Walking for a million years
Searching for you face
Never seen the likes of you
When you put me in my place
Crawling through the years
Pawning off my hate
I think that I can reach you now
But I'm a million years too late

Must have been a lie
Must have been a lie
If only you could try to be
Try to be somebody else

You kick me when I'm down
Just when I've made it through
I cannot understand
Why I can't get close to you
The feelings that I feel
Would kill you, this I'm sure
Maybe that's what's wrong
I'm just too dirty and you're too pure

Must have been a lie
Must have been a lie
If only you could try to be
Try to be somebody else

And they come to be just like you
And they come to be just like you
And they come to be just like you
And I'll come to leave you living like you do

Must have been a lie
Must have been a lie
If only you could try to be
Try to be somebody else


Thanks in advance.
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