so maybe i've got this working

[uhh its charlie]

links, yeah!

this is something of my own. i know the volume is messed up in the beginning. but give it a listen, yeah?

http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/273...gnificence.mp3

[XLR]

A touching song with intelligent lyrics. I like the instrumentation, the panning of the gtr and piano, and the mix balance. The harmony at :58 and 2:00 has a surprising turn and makes the lyric over it have a strong impact. Really grabbed me there. I think the piano's rise in the last phrase is very effective arranging. Reminds me of someone well known but I'm not going to say because it's definitely not derivative of them, just similar in feel.

The vocal has a good sound and is in tune most of the time but the loud breaths between phrases are distracting. Not that I think they should be inaudible, just lower level. The lyrics are really well written and thought provoking, but the first line seems to set up a different mood or expectation than what the song turns out to be - a little shallow in comparison. I realize you may have wanted that change but it's harder for me as a listener to "emotionally track" the mood of a song that way.

The piano's sound in the beginning is unusual, and at first I almost thought it was something else - harplike almost.

Thanks.

Tim

[Dogman]

Nice song. Other than some volume issues, not much to add. You did a good job on the performance, and the recording seems well done, just a few mixing issues....the volume. Very good start. Nicely done.
Ed

[XLR]

Dogman, I agree about a volume inconsistency in the vocal. A mic technique thing likely, but could be helped I bet with some smart compression.

Tim

[ecktronic]

Vocals are over compressed and dont sit well. Try bringing the vox level down a little. Not enough bass guitar.
Overall sounds good. Stereo vocals are a cool thing to use in some songs.

[giraffe]

a little sibellent, make that a bunch sibellent

i love the low harm, maby bring it up a little

yea, the bass too, a little.

i agree, too much compression over all, i feal like i'm getting beat up, let it sit back some. the entire song i mean.

i can hear you hit the space-bar in the end, try to find it and cut it out, check the R harm track.

good song
good voice

[giraffe]

one more???

[uhh its charlie]

Originally Posted by giraffe

a little sibellent, make that a bunch sibellent

i love the low harm, maby bring it up a little

yea, the bass too, a little.

i agree, too much compression over all, i feal like i'm getting beat up, let it sit back some. the entire song i mean.

i can hear you hit the space-bar in the end, try to find it and cut it out, check the R harm track.

good song
good voice

thanks a bunch, however i don't use a computer. i'm running a yamaha aw 4416, i think i was sitting up in my stool

&sure, i'll post more songs in a bit.

[uhh its charlie]

i do agree with you guys.
i had a sinus infection, so some harmonies and vocals are a little off.
the dual vocals are abit loud, yes.
&yeah, i smash the hell out of vocals sometimes hahaha

thanks guys

[jerberson12]

Originally Posted by uhh its charlie

i do agree with you guys.
i had a sinus infection, so some harmonies and vocals are a little off.
the dual vocals are abit loud, yes.
&yeah, i smash the hell out of vocals sometimes hahaha

thanks guys

wow! i didnt thought sinus will make you sound good. Matchbox 20 isnt it?

[uhh its charlie]

haha it's not so good.