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Old 02-23-2005
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Comfort Zone

COMFORT ZONE
© Tom Guertin All Rights Reserved
(Intended for a female vocalist)

(Verse 1)
You spend your waking hours
Seldom leaving home
Never try to push yourself
Content to be alone
Vegetating on the couch
Is all you care to do
While wolfing down potato chips
And guzzling on a brew
Phew...

(Chorus)
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Never reach beyond
The umbilical cord you call a telephone
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Hey dog, here's a bone...
For your comfort zone

(Verse 2)
Tired of seein' your holey crotch
Put on some underwear
The way you sling those jogging pants
The crack 'o yer ass sucks air
You leave the place in such a mess
You’re ragged all the time
Curled in front of the TV set
Just waitin’ for your prime...
Time...

(Chorus)
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Never reach beyond
The umbilical cord you call a telephone
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Hey dog, here's a bone...
For your comfort zone

(Bridge)
Hey, Mr. Potato head
Yeah you -- over there
Man you’ve pushed it way too far
Now haul your ass, to the nearest bar...
Your new...

(Chorus)
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Never reach beyond
The umbilical cord you call a telephone
Comfort zone
You're drowning in your comfort zone
Hey dog, here's a bone...
For your comfort zone

(Tag)
Hey dog, here's a bone...
For your comfort zone
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Old 02-24-2005
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Not bad - I got a smile out of it!
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At last - a song about my dream lifestyle

Just need a small lottery win and I'm there.

Good fun lyric - a verse about what he's missing out on, or the downside or something, would give it more bite IMHO.

Cheers

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At last - a song about my dream lifestyle

Just need a small lottery win and I'm there.

Good fun lyric - a verse about what he's missing out on, or the downside or something, would give it more bite IMHO.

Cheers

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Good, fun song. Are you going to post an mp3 so we can hear it too?
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Old 02-25-2005
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Thanks for the feedback, guys. I'm going to give some thought to adding a verse (or perhaps change the bridge) to address what he's missing out on. My initial reaction to this suggestion was that the relationship was already beyond the point where what he was missing out on really mattered to the protagonist -- she just wanted him out (as revealed in the bridge). But...I'm never one to dismiss suggestions (especially when noticed by more than one person). Thanks again.
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