With a Whimper

[Unorthodokz]

With a Whimper

I saw you down at the train station
You said "this is how they ran away back in the day"
You act like lack of motivation is something new
Well maybe for you but we were here long ago

You’re in denial of being as down as everyone else
Say that underground is safer than stuck in with a nail
I say it’s not worth the effort and not worth the hurt
You cause to yourself and the ones that love you more
But still you…

Choke back tears and look up at the sky
Pretend that everything will turn alright
But really all you want to do is die
I look at you with open arms, meet your tears with open heart
But you stay silent then you tell my why
You can never look at anyone in the eye

"This place just chewed me up and never slowed to cease"
Don’t you see they’re all like that, you just have to suck it up
You know I’m made of the same breath as you
I’m still standing and have bled all the same thoughts
That’s not the right thing to do
But still you…

Choke back tears and look up at the sky
Pretend that everything will turn alright
But really all you want to do is die
I look at you with open arms, meet your tears with open heart
But you stay silent then you tell my why
You can never look at anyone in the eye

Look at me and we’ll see eye to eye
I refuse to let go and wonder
When you leave, what you’ll bleed,
And if our bond with breath is through
As long as you know that life
That pain, that death is nothing new

The world is not against you
The world isn't against you
I won’t let this light go out
I won’t let this light go out
With a whimper you plead for life to end


My friend and I write songs. This is our most recent. Thoughts?

[d(-_-)b-Phones]

Well songs have music, maybe you and your friend write poems, or lyrics.

I would like to hear this in a musical format before I make any judgements, the long lines could be good or bad depending.

[Unorthodokz]

We have music written for it. Just haven't had the time to record it yet.

[vangore]

no matter what it is its beautiful and i was genuinly moved by it, well done sir you paint a perfect picture.

[Unorthodokz]

Thank You, vangore.

Anyone else?