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Old 10-22-2004
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Can you proofread my new website.

I just built www.lukemacneil.com last night, can you guys take a look and if you have extra time or whatnot, check for spelling or gramatical errors? I'd like to give this site out to club owners so I want it to be as professional as possible.

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Ok - checked it out and this is what I found. On home page, Welcome section, you mis-spelled "perform" - you did it again on the bio page. Also on the bio page, you need to use the word "copyrighted". Copywrote is not only wrong, it's not a word (you don't copywrite, you copyright). You should also call the places "coffee houses" not coffee shops (unless you play at Dunkin' Donuts). On your links page, you forgot the apostrophe in "I've" in music theory. Maybe you should also put quotation marks around the Edison quote to break it up a bit.

Hope I'm not being too nitpicky, but you asked! :-) Hope it helped. From one MA guy to another.
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OK you Taylor plucking dude-
1. "Check this site back often" ? That's awkward, and incorrect usage. Try "Check back often".
2. orthodox is mispelled.
3.throughout is mispelled.
4. should be ""has" since adopted
5. "recently broke apart" -incorrect case. Try "split up" or "separated".
6. All of what Rick W. said. Straight to you from the Massachusetts proofreading squad. BTW, there are two 'M's in "grammatical error".
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Thanks for your help guys. The quotes at the top I actually threw into a database and it grabs a random one every time the page loads... when I can't sleep I play with php.

Thanks, I really appreciate the help, I would hate to have people look over me because I can't spell. I fixed most of the errors that you pointed out.

I hear you on the real player too... I hate it, but its the closest to standard I can think of.
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