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Old 06-08-2000
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This came out of Stiggy Dazrdust's post, called "Idea".

I challenge you/us to contribute a line, with this approximate rhythm/metre:

"Don't buy a house in Leighton Buzzard"

After a few days, we try and hang 'em together and let the tunesmiths and V-band people have a go.

Here's my effort:

"Overcast and threatening rain"

(You can tell I'm from the UK)

Come on - give it a go!

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Last night we had a barbeque party at 3:00 in the morning. Here is my tribute...

"Overcast and threatening rain"...
Stomach wrenched in searing pain...
Ate too much steak last night I fear...
Looks like its time to get more beer...

"Don't buy a house in Leighton Buzzard"...
You might get me as your neighbor's...
You'd hate my late night barbeques...
Unless you like to party too...
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Thanks.

There was a hit about three-four years ago, which went: "Things Can Only Get Better!"
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And they have.

Thanks, Emeric and drstawl for posting over on the "Idea" thread.

Can we try to avoid the end-rhyme - just stick to the metre/meter?

Go, wordsmiths!
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Oh my. After how quite a few of us have admitted that we suck at lyric writing, you want some lines from us? This should be fun.
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I think to deep to feel the pain.
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"She took some other guy's dick and stabbed it through your heart."

Oh wait, it doesn't fit the meter. Never mind.

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Nah, I can't take credit for it. I just heard it while one drunk friend was giving advice to another drunk friend.
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Nice one, Ron. It's got a real triplet feel. Hope it's not autobiographical!
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Overcast and threatening rain.
Tapping ass is the name of the game.
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Over cast and threating rain
We're lost again,I take the blame
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Ok I started now I need to put more down!!!

Over cast and threatening rain
we're lost again,I take the blame
heart and soul I felt the blow
we're in this storm and noone knows
thunder rage and lighting strikes.....

Not much just a little something to give ya!

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Overcast and threatening rain
Storm ahead will be my bane
But I'm too numb to feel the warning wind
Day succumbs to early night
But I'm too blind to miss the light
Unknowingly I stumble toward my end

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I've got more in mind /take em' or leave em' I don't mind just let me type them I'm on a roll ....let me run with it .....:-)

over cast and threatening rain
vortex of truth shall be detained
serinity and calmness befor the storm
watching and waiting destruction form
thunder rolls within my heart
lighting strikes with unhealing marks
there's no shelter to cover me.........


there ya go a little simalar to the last one I wrote but different in meaning....


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Old 07-03-2000
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overcast and threatening rain
I waite for you by the train
I stood for hours, you didn't show
unseen tears,I had to go
staying would be too hard to try
what's left now is to say good-bye
memories of laughter is gone I fear
my memory erased........
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here are some corny lyrics....

overcast and threatening rain
my music career,down the drain
writing for hours ,can't seem to stop
and not one song will go to the top
racking my brain to find a ryhme
Damn!writers block hits evertime
so many emotions..................
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Well, ya can't keep a good thread down!

Psychob. and Mystic R. - good, moody stuff, although I don't like the "vortex of truth" line, personally, y'understand?

Keep 'em coming!
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Delso I must admit I do agree with you .After I posted it and re-read .It sounded a bit much for what I was going for .Thanks for your opinion.always nice to hear honesty.
We'll see what I can come up with next.Some days are better than others:-)
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Great stuff - I like the train one, classic images and the second one had me LOL!
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Don't buy a house in Leighton Buzzard
To far away, and the weather's a pain
You need a clear sky, in Buzzard there's mostly
Wind, overcast and threatening rain

Soon you will panic, run for your car
buckle your seat belt put in a high gear
above the speed limit you head for the M1
and try to outrun your Bedfordshire fear

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Brilliant. Have you ever visited Leighton Buzzard?

I couldn't begin to write a song in Swedish - jag tikker om det, is about all I know and I think I got that wrong!
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Thanks, Delso! No, haven't been there. All I know about it I got from the web. 35 miles North of London, and a map revealed it to be in Bedfordshire, close to the M1. Internet Rules!

Yup, you got it wrong! But you were very close. It's "Jag tycker om det".
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Great ! it's nice to get someone to LOL .I'm glad to have humored you :-)

I'll give it another go today to see what I can come up this afternoon.

Over cast and threantening rain
my since of grief still remains
striving to reach my destination
your abcents feeds my aggravation
you are here only in my mind
making love to you I've left behind
all I know this journeys long..........
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The distance is out of focus...
Beyond the line in the sand...
I discard my weathered compass...
There are no poles to draw me in...
My conscious shows me my fears...
And this journey has wearied my soul...
But the known and the unknown are the same...
They are the feet I walk with, pushing on...
In this "Overcast and Threatening Rain"...

Good idea Delso

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I will tread this mountain...
I will scale this rocky wall...
My shoes are blistered feet...
So far from my center, my home...
This is my path, my vision...
And will not trade for any man's...
For this rain is my lesson...
My answer... my question... my...
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