Poring my heart out

[Prizmaxic]

advice please, this is the first song I've recorded for a while. I tried to go to the limit.

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/...d=3033&alid=-1

[mawtangent]

My gut opinion...this sounds ambitious and you seem to be having fun, thats good...made me think of early Chicago...the melody is okay...the drums are good (are you mainly a drummer?)...the vocal sounds out of tune a lot though...there is some bad clashing of musical notes on the second half of the verses (when you strike the chords)...I would put in a string sound toward the last-half of the song to add some variation and intensity.

[Prizmaxic]

so true, it's weird how it sounds good when I'm making it, then the next day I listen and it sounds like crap. Yeah drums are the only thing I play. The rest I just slowly record off keyboard. That's the true test though, If you come back to a song after a few days and still like it, then it must be good. thanks for listening and for the comments, I'll use those.

[Prizmaxic]

I made a new version of this song, with different lyrics, and some harmony parts thrown in. I think it sounds good, but tomorrow may be a different story. It's still a work in progress, so any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.