Rewrite

[Bucks]

SCRAPS AND CRUMBS OF KINDNESS
© Buck Stewart / June 2004

Feeling weak and lost
So empty and alone
How long can I last
With nothing but
The past

I tried to let you know
The hunger that I feel
But you no longer give
The love I need
To live

(Chorus)
Scraps and crumbs of kindness
Are all I get from you
I can’t make it thru on
Scraps and crumbs of kindness
What can I do?

(Bridge)
Did I let you down? I wish I knew, I try to guess
This is so hard to swallow, I stay confused, I can’t rest
Our love has grown stale, I feel so out of place
If you know why, you won’t tell me to my face
You just persist
Pretending with...

Scraps and crumbs of kindness
Are all I get from you
I can’t make it thru on
Scraps and crumbs of kindness
What can I do?

Feelings have been seared
Love’s recipe is in the trash
All the choices left to me
End up with
You free

And now my plate is bare
My cup is full of salty tears
You can sweep the floor
With my soul
Evermore

Scraps and crumbs of kindness
I can’t do this anymore
Please no more
Scraps and crumbs of kindness
I’m sorry, please
No more

[Garry Sharp]

That's cool Bucks. If it were me, I'd use something (possibly the bridge) to tell a little more story - perhaps something you did wrong that led to this, for example, or some way in which she had changed. Just put a little more meat on why it's come to this.

[Bucks]

Thanks Gary. Others have said similar things. I'm going to get into the music part and maybe that will bring some additions.
Thanks again