Please review Zeeza..

[Future of Rock]

I'm not looking for a technical review per se but more of an overall and songwriting one, if possible.

Hi Fi

Lo Fi

[Henri Devill]

Pleasant voice and good vocal melody in a Devinals sorta way{I like}...weak lyrics {lack focus/too wordie} and weak musical arrangement{The music lays there with no definision}..Needs a rewrite IMHO..tempo needs to be looked at..find the swing of the vocal melody and derive the muscial groove to that..There is no real strong hook because the chour. meanders a bit..Loose the Cute effects in relation to the internet{IMHO} In the larger picture they will come off as "cheap"....All this depends on what you are trying to acheave though..3:20 max you are running long at over 5:00 mins now...Good luck you have the germ of a good song!




Don

[Future of Rock]

thanks for your comments

[Flash]

Future of Rock, I think this song tells a very interesting story. I have always disagreed with the "TIME" limit. 3:20, is that it now? 4/5ths of my songs would be ruled out. Alice's restaurant never would have been listened to, over 18:00 minutes. Anyways....
I thought there was some interesting ideas used in the song.
Like I said earlier, it tells a very interesting story.
Thanks for the listen.........

[Future of Rock]

Thank you on behalf of Zeeza

[Blue Bear Sound]

[slkeen]

I was waiting for a change up or break in the song, I gave up after couple of minutes. You have a good voice, but you need to let loose and sing out, at least once in a while. The song has potential, but lacks dynamics and variety. This might sound better with just vocal and acoustic guitar.